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SchrEck Inc. Started conversation Sep 3, 2001
Hi Moonglum,
this is another great one, liked it very much. 
As usual, here are a few minor points that I stumbled over:
- Immunity paragraph: The smiley in sentence '(which is quite handy really 
).' has to go, these are off limits in edited entries.
- Staff discount para: 'but it should reduce the [bill] to a much more reasonable level.'
- Food dispenser section: 'money munching devices ever evented.' - invented?
- Violence para: 'Just because you haven't managed to get you[r] packet of crisps or...'
- Drinks dispenser section: 'hot or cold liquids which can be loos[el]y referred to as...'
- Coffee para: 'I would say that dispensers...' - the first person has to go, try 'It could be said that dispensers...'. Also '... caf[f]eine free.'
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Moonglum Clampflower (MornC), Muse of Ego, Keeper of the Lamp and Guru, (aka Happinose) Posted Sep 3, 2001
Hi SchrEck Inc.
Thanks for the comments, glad you liked it. I have corrected all the typos and taken out the smiley 
. Sometimes my brain goes in to autowriting mode. It auto get the right spelling but doesn't.
With the first person bit, I simply removed the "I would say" chunk as it wasn't really needed.
Thanks for your help. Next chunk in progress.
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