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So, any ideas why IV and VIII aren't really working for you<?>

Blade Runner never seemed to be funny to me...

And part IX is what part VIII was meant to be but I had to split them into to for reasons digibox length...

I'm trying to get to the whole point of the plot but I have to do these explanations!
Part IX misses the point aswell so I have to put it at the start of part X!

Blade Runner never seemed to be funny to me...

And part IX is what part VIII was meant to be but I had to split them into to for reasons digibox length...

I'm trying to get to the whole point of the plot but I have to do these explanations!
Part IX misses the point aswell so I have to put it at the start of part X!

So.. What one do you think is the best<?>

[that way I can look at both ends and see if I can help ]

Out of all eight or between the two?

Of all 8

Episode II...

But IX might be the second favourite...

Great...

Some passing comments...
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part IV
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"...of having gone unconscience involuntarily - a hangover."

Just a typo there, although I think this sentence could do with rewording.. It's a great idea, but the delivery could be better.

"It was just a plain of- of- clouds?!"

I think there could be a better way of expressing this too. The way it is presented seems out of context with the rest of the narrative.

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part VIII
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"misplaced parts or decided it wasn't necessary..."

I'd just stick with one or the other. They're both good ideas. Even merging them into one might work, but the 'or' doesn't feel right with the narrative in this context.

"The Animalia Age was...."

This section could be very funny... I think it needs to be uncluttered a little bit...

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I think in all that they're both very good

Might not be able to do anything about VIII...

How does the plain of clouds seem out of context?
He thinks he's dead!

IT's the of-of stutter in the narrator's voice that doesn't fit

Well I see that line as rather apt!
You do know these only go through two stages: write-up then type-up?

It's a simple make it up as I go along, and when the type up comes, I replace/add lines that I think work!

'Twas just my thoughts...

I tend to work like that, but usually there's a scribble-over-the-write-up-in-pencil stage in between

What do you write?

I might have part IX up tonight but I still have Small Screen Surfin' to do for the Post!

I write mainly poetry, and obscure short stories with evil and supernatural undertones. F126899?thread=299629&post=3823880#p3823880 I haven't published any of my stuff on h2g2, apart from vaguely comical stuff which isn't really all that funny.

ooooh! I didn't realise you wrote for the post!
I'll be looking forward to IX

I'm pretty happy about a joke in IX... It's one of those *groan* kind of ones...

Of course you didn't realise I write for the post... I haven't got my badge!!!

A groan joke... Oh dear....

When will you get your shiny badge<?>

Don't know!

I'll look out for your article in next week's post then

Well I suggest you read the first five!

FIVE<?>!

Blimey.