h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: VOUCHERS - A2248724
Author: outrider...(sent to thine succour)..AKA THE LATE Mr OUTRIDER!! - U559171

A2248724

It's a first contribution so all criticism is welcome. Braces self!!

i like it, outrider.

In my neck o' the woods, they're called 'gift certificates'.

Couple spelling things:

Reindeer;
"Manna from heaven"
(mebbe some ohters)

Try to avoid double punctuation (!!)

Since i'm situationally dyslexic (old eyes), i like the open, comfortable layout of your presentation. Someone will eventually recommend the application of GuideML, in which case you can stop SHOUTING.

Idle scenario: If a gentleman wishes to ascertain his standing with a lady, he will purchase a voucher for her from a lingerie chain....

Seriously (IMHO), the subject may be appropriate for the EG, with a slight stylistic makeover.

Thanks for the tips. I'll sort the spelling (wonky wand).

The next to last line, I imagine the accounts would be shouting to their coleagues.

GML is not an option for me yet. Played with it and my ACE took away the matches before I torched something vital!

This is really good outrider.

I would second he suggestion about the spelling. If you have access to one run this through a spellchecker, I noticed a couple as I read through.

I disagree about making this EG worthy, I think to do so would take a lot of the humour and soul out of the piece. I think it is fine where it is.

As for GuideML, I wouldn't. Again it isn't needed here.


Hopefully see more of your entries outrider


TRFKAKJ

Thanks for the input.

I'll copy it to waord this week and run it through a spellchecker.

I meant to say Word.

I've run a spell checker over it. Back to school for me.

Any other problems?

A little bit of Woodstock talk has crept in in "You’re just happy..." ( you've been copy/pasting.)

I liked this. It was an entertaining read and then to find that all that borderline serious reasoning was *really* because you'd lost your vouchers . Excellent.

I think some of the options GuideML allows could improve it presentationwise. But it's perfectly readable as it is (unlike some nonGML pieces - thankyou for putting line breaks in!) so it's not something to worry about.
Waz

Thanks Waz.

Woodstock has been sent back to Snoopy.

I've read it so many times that I've reached the point of reading what I expect to be there, instead of seeing the reality.

Hey, I never took away your matches I just put ypu in a straight jacket!!


I thought of something else - the FREE gift card you get with them - and if you are really lucky you get to chose which hideous design you want!



Mort

Just when I thought I was "done".

This is nicely done.
Our crony John is forever losing gift vouchers.

N

Thank you, Nadia.

I guess the old addage "If you don't use it, you'll lose it" applies to vouchers.

Thanks to all of you who have taken the time to reply.

The fact that there are so few suggest that VOUCHERS is a boring title (and it is). Any suggestions?

I thought "Sex, sex, sex!" or "Sex and how to get it" might work better, but I don't think readers would be happy to find that there's no sex and no chance of getting it.

It is a good article . 'Vouchers' says it all really, though I guess you could change it to something like 'Gift Vouchers, the true story' . OK so perhaps that's a bad example.

how about

"Vouchers:- An accountants best friend"

Both sound better than just shouting vouchers. I must get out of the habit of shouting.

Cheers folk

Ok, I've changed the title. Fingers crossed.

Well, that's better than my suggestion certainly.

Still isn't selling it to the masses.

I'll have to get a couple of nubile models to hold up a couple of vouchers to get the Sun readers to pick up a copy!