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A972164 - Faces and open spaces
ChiKiSpirit -- A1008604 Started conversation Mar 23, 2003
Entry: Faces and open spaces - A972164
Author: ChiKiSpirit - U201592
"A972164" Faces and open spaces
A972164 - Faces and open spaces
a girl called Ben Posted Mar 23, 2003
I like this, though I am not sure what to make of it. It is evocative and allusive, though I also find it ellusive. My preference is for more lucid poetry, though I understand and appreciate that there is the other kind which plays with our minds and emotions.
Thank you for posting it.
B
A972164 - Faces and open spaces
J Posted Mar 23, 2003
Hi Ben!
I read this before and forgot to say anything, I'm not 100% sure I follow it... 
maybe it's because I have a limited intelligence.
A972164 - Faces and open spaces
a girl called Ben Posted Mar 23, 2003
I didn't understand it either - but it is evocative, and I think it works.
B
A972164 - Faces and open spaces
ChiKiSpirit -- A1008604 Posted Mar 26, 2003
I wrote it years ago, although it still keeps happening to me
A972164 - Faces and open spaces
Tonsil Revenge (PG) Posted Mar 28, 2003
I stood there once.
I still have the photograph.
I go back with the picture,
and there is gone.
I remember the feel of the sun
that still shines in the photo,
but it has yellowed
and I am dark.
There was a future
to that boy,
standing there,
looking forward.
Now I look back
at my looking,
and wonder if I would have smiled,
if I could have seen me now.
A972164 - Faces and open spaces
ChiKiSpirit -- A1008604 Posted May 30, 2003
Hello you lot! I have returned from beyond the land of you know where - hope to see you all again soon....
ChiKi 
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SomeMuppet Posted Jul 12, 2005
Bit of a strange one this. The rhythm is excellent and carries you along. I did have to read it 3 times and I'm still not sure. Sometimes I do think the overuse of the word places jarrs a little, but then on another reading I won't notice it.
Perhaps Caccable?
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A972164 - Faces and open spaces
- 1: ChiKiSpirit -- A1008604 (Mar 23, 2003)
- 2: a girl called Ben (Mar 23, 2003)
- 3: J (Mar 23, 2003)
- 4: a girl called Ben (Mar 23, 2003)
- 5: J (Mar 23, 2003)
- 6: ChiKiSpirit -- A1008604 (Mar 26, 2003)
- 7: Tonsil Revenge (PG) (Mar 28, 2003)
- 8: friendlywithteeth (Apr 23, 2003)
- 9: ChiKiSpirit -- A1008604 (May 30, 2003)
- 10: SomeMuppet (Jul 12, 2005)
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