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Tonsil Revenge (PG) Posted Oct 2, 2002
I went over bent,
wincing,
to take my pun-ishment.
I had asked for it,
I had made my bed,
and now had to lie in it,
covers over head.
The uncovered eye
is liable to
catch anything.
That poem caught
my eye
now
I hope it will
throw it
back....
Time In A Bottle
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Spiff Posted Oct 2, 2002
hi TR,
bye both of you. off for a swift 'demi' afore i eat.
cya
spiff
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Tonsil Revenge (PG) Posted Oct 2, 2002
Are you drinking coffee or watching 'G.I. Jane' on fast-forward?
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Trout Montague Posted Oct 3, 2002
Striptease on Freeze Frame is far more satisfying.
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a girl called Ben Posted Feb 16, 2003
*Dragging this thread kicking and screaming back on topic*
Dr T's original poem, which this thread relates to, is this:
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Here is a 'poem' I wrote for the handover of Hong Kong to China in 1997.
Bastion
So long sovereign surrogate mother.
150 years of servility and subjugation,
Born in the cloud of an opium epidural;
Now to return to the home of my father,
Land of my people,
No longer to be your little yellow bastion.
Dr Montague Trout
20 June 1997
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I like it. I like the wordplay of the last line, and the imagery of the opium epidural. In fact the metaphor is well sustained, and the whole thing does it for me.
I am bumping this up to the top of the page for my fellow Underguiders' delectation, pleasure and commentary.
Ben
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Trout Montague Posted Feb 20, 2003
I've submitted it to the BBC Poem Competition.
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Trout Montague Posted Feb 20, 2003
"the metaphor is well sustained" was enough for me. Thanks.
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Trout Montague Posted Jun 30, 2003
I never won any prizes, dammit.
I like the poetry of Post 21 though.
Trout
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a girl called Ben Posted Jun 30, 2003
Thanks for bumping it up Dr T, it was good to read it again.
B
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Trout Montague Posted Jun 30, 2003
I just saw you were spring-cleaning. I've got a whole heap of crap in here as well as some that I'd like to get into UG if poss. Just post something impolite to those you don't want and I'll ship 'em out.
Trout.
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a girl called Ben Posted Jun 30, 2003
Well if it is really crap, you can always remove it yourself! But don't worry, Dr, I will call it like I see it. However, I like most of the stuff of yours that I have seen.
B
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