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A52328847 - Silver Apple

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Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor

Entry: Silver Apple - A52328847
Author: dmitrigheorgheni - U1590784

When you read this, please remember where I come from...

And what happens when you ask hillbillies to tell stories.

smiley - biggrin

My count makes it 1,485 words. (Thanks for the word limit: Longer would not have been better.)


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Post 2

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

smiley - book

Ms GB

(will read it tomorrowsmiley - biro)smiley - run


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minorvogonpoet

This is an intriguing yarn - I think our narrator had drunk too many whiskies! smiley - drunk

I think you could have done better. It doesn't have the psychological subtlety of, say, 'Guilty', or the clever plays on time and place of your science fiction.

But then, I'm miffed at not being able to identify the Yeats. I'll leave that to the cleverer folk round here. smiley - doh




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aka Bel - A87832164

This is intriguing (and I don't mean the Yeats, I can't be bothered to try to find out which poem you are referring to). smiley - biggrin


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Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor

Thanks for the reading, MVP - I'm sure the Yeats will come to you (and surprised at having stumped our most knowledgeable poetry person). It might, er, add a bit to the picture.

smiley - wah I'm disappointed that you don't find psychological subtlety here...

I was obviously going for depth psychology.smiley - whistle


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Post 6

minorvogonpoet

Were you thinking of 'The Song of Wandering Aengus', with its lines:

"Though I am old with wandering
Through hollow lands and hilly lands,
I will find out where she has gone,
And kiss her lips and take her hands;
And walk among long dappled grass,
And pluck till time and times are done
The silver apples of the mooon,
The golden apples of the sun."


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Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor

smiley - applause Yes. Got it in one.smiley - smiley

Yeats' trout and my mermaid have a bit in common.smiley - winkeye


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Post 8

Danny B

What a lovely story smiley - biggrin

Bonus points from me for mentioning a) Sheffield; b) John Cleese; and c) bilingual punk-folk (the mind boggles...) smiley - laugh


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Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor

The mind boggled back then...smiley - winkeye...rude words in Greek...


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Post 10

minorvogonpoet

Do you mean that the bilingual punk folk band was real? smiley - bigeyes


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Post 11

Tibley Bobley

Your man sounds as though he's full of Blarneysmiley - laugh

You've really captured that charactersmiley - ok


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Post 12

Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor

smiley - laugh The bilingual folk.rock punk was a backyard-and-beach experiment, with guitar and bouzouki.

Thanks, Tib.smiley - laugh So my alter ego is an unreliable narrator?smiley - winkeye Sounds about right...


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