h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Oh Bob, I'm sorry I forgot all about this.

It's a bit late tonight, but I promise I'll give it a look tomorrow when I'm fresher, it's nearly time to log off now.

Ok Fizzymouse

No problem

You still need to change the title to North Midlands but otherwise its a great entry...roll along the south Midlands area that I know best and I can comment properly!

Hi Cardi-Bling


Thanks all done...

Hi Cardi-Bling (again)
PS; Have a look at this
http://www.bbc.co.uk/dna/h2g2/brunel/A22909917

Hi Bob, got back to this as promised, but I'm still not much of a reviewer.


>>The last Mercian king was Chosen by the Mercian Witan Athelred Mucil (883-911) but was an Earl of Alfred of Wessex.<< This sentence would need tidied up.


>>There were two purposes of a market charter, first it formalised the market and made it hard for any rival market setting up close by. << Your use of the word *first* here implies there should be a second, but it isn't mentioned until later.


>>This was the personal revenge of king William I for the slaughter of the army of an army of 700 men in Durham.<< One too many armies there I think.


>>Also the cultural, and economic structure was destroyed this is evidenced by the lack of chartered markets in the area3, the area.<< No comma after cultural but one is needed after destroyed. Fullstop after footnote and capital T - The area and lose that fullstop.



>>There were important deposits of silver and lead a few miles and a fort was erected in Chester in AD 60.<< I have no idea what this means.


That's as far as I can get this evening, oh, and all your kings and kingdoms need capital letters, but this is really starting to take shape now.

Thanks Fizzymouse

All done as suggested

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