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Entry: Embracing Limbo - A11573994
Author: Phlook - U1344303

A story i wrote in November

It's a bit.. obscure at times, i tend to think as such, but tell me what you think i love all criticism, i definitly need to improve my writing!

Nice. Liked the apple reference, spotted it was eden a bit before it was said.

I enjoyed reading this, and found it both frightening and sad.

Liked your neat ending

Thanks for the great comments!
I never expected such good feedback

Anything anyone would change about it?

Alternate titles? (i titled it before i started writing actually..)

More elaborate developments of plot/character/setting? Did I describe both planar existences well enough to immerse yourself in it?

Oh yes, it's stunning. No changes required.

Congratulations Phlook . 'Embracing Limbo' has been picked and accepted as an <./>underguide</.> entry.

An UnderGuide Gem Polisher will be in touch about any revisions or tweakings you might want or they might suggest before creating a UG copy of the entry to be featured on h2g2's Front Page one week.

Congrats again, and thank you for contributing here .

Yes, congratulations Phlook

wow! how unexpected!

thanks alot everyone

It was very sad but I enjoyed reding it Congratulations