h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Made all the changes I agree with

Does this mean I have to read the whole thing through again, to find out which ones you don't agree with?

You don't have to make all the suggested changes, but it is normal, if you don't agree with suggestions, to say why you don't agree.

made a few more changes - these are the last changes I am going to make

I don't wish to be rude, but don't you think that saying you will not make anymore changes is a little negative? Especially as people are trying to help you get this entry up to scratch.
There are one or two more changes that you might consider.

The sentence that has 'is that off Trumpington Street' does'nt sound right. Can't you phrase that a little differently? Maybe drop the 'that' bit.

Also you still have systematic beds starting with capital letters in your opening paragraph. Systematic beds are a method of planting. not a title or place name, it really should be in lower case.

It's a shame that such a great entry is hanging around in PR when it should be on the Front Page. As Venus mentions, that sentance has a word in there that shouldn't be there, you've got 'dimolished' which needs correcting, and still you have lots of capital letters where their shouldn't be any.

Although this might be just perfect for another purpose, perhaps promotional literature, or an essay or something, for h2g2 it needs to fit in with h2g2 House Style, which all the people posting in this thread are very familiar with.

It is possible that your entry could be accepted as it is, but it would need to be changed by a Sub Editor to fit the House Style, but as a Scout I would rather not pick something where the author seems slightly uninterested in interacting with their reviewers. Especially as your previous entry had very inconsistent capitalisation as well, which the Sub Editor was unable to properly deal with.

OK, cambridgecarnivorous, I'll read through it again.

This is a good entry, as I said before, and it would be a pity to see it not published in the guide because you're not prepared to listen to suggestions.

The most important thing you need to do now is to answer the following question:

You say the collection of trees is still growing today. Do you mean that it hasn't died and the trees are still growing, or that new trees are being added to the collection, making it bigger? You'll need to let us know the answer to this, as we can't tell from reading what you've written.

The rest of the changes are straightforward grammar and house style ones. I don't know why you shouldn't agree with them, as they are only correcting slight mistakes and inconsistencies in what you have written. Since you refuse to do them, the sub-editor will have to do them, since the Entry can't really be published without these being corrected.



dimolished --> demolished

"The present gardens were founded ... and was opened ..." -- that should be "were opened"

"In the 1960s the rest of the garden was opened up, the gardens in this area include the famous
and colourful winter garden opened in 1976" -- this is two sentences stuck together with a comma. It should be split into two sentences.

"The Systematics Beds are an original feature designed by Henslow. It is made up of 144 island beds " -- you're mixing plural and singular here. Change it to "There are 144 island beds..."

this garden is still unique -- this is a separate sentence which is tacked onto the previous one using a comma

Bateman street gate --> Bateman Street gate

under planted with bulbs --> underplanted with bulbs

botanical illustrator Georita Harriott -- move the full stop from before the to after it.

On street car parking --> On-street car parking

There are also some capitals that need to be sorted out:

Continents Apart , Looks at the plants -- should be:
Continents Apart looks at the plants

and the same applies to all the others in that list.

I've made a few changes, taken out some phasing that is not needed

Major rewrite of p4. p2 changed spelling and taken away irrelivent stuff + added more revent information. Thanks Cambridge Carnivorous

Made a few more changes - This should now make the article easier to read and understand + with good spelling -

Entry: Cambridge University Botanic Garden - A22124413
Author: cambridgecarnivorous - U7078493

Hi there CC. A few suggestions:

'The first glasshouses were added in 1888 but after they started to rot were replaced with the present 1931/34 teak Glasshouse Range which has now being restored.'

Commas after 'but and 'rot' would break that sentence up nicely.

'Systematics was a system that had never been used before'

Sounds interested- can you explain what it is?

'under planted with bulbs'

Should under planted be one word? Perhaps hyphenated?

'fenland and Wicken Fen'

Who are Wicked Fen?

' Cape of South Africa and Southwest Australia. 2'

The footnote here needs to come in before the full stop.

'flowered in 2004 3'

You need to loose the spave between '2004' and the foonote.

'free for a £25 yearly subscription.4'

Footnote before the full stop again.

'at the Bateman Street stop.5'

Ditto.

This is a great entry. Don't worry that Gnomon's list of corrections is longer than the original entry, that is quite normal.

Are you still working on this cambridgecarnivorous?

The author hasn't posted for a couple of weeks, is this too much work for a sub to make the remaining changes? The content is good.

I agree, EW - It looks ready to me.

I agree

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