h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

yes it's another one from me )
any suggestions?

Here's the link:
http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A559721

I suggest you remember putting in a link in the future! Now I'm off to read it.

It's rather informative (especially liked the info about the manufacturers), but it seems like you wanted to make a longer entry and therefore reuse the same information twice. I got the fact that there are 800 varieties the first time...

In addition, you need to rework the last paragraph so it doesn't talk about you specifically. You might do it something like this:

"Take IT professionals for example: they're not mountaineers, nor survivalists. Because their job and/or hobby entail unscrewing computer casings (among other things) the proper choice of knife might be one that has not one, but two screw drivers. Another good choice would be a small magnifying glass for identifying those tell tale burn marks on dead or dying computer hardware."

I think you get the idea. Just generalise a bit and write in third person.

thanks, i keep slipping into first person naughty naughty
it's corrected now

Great, very creative third person rewrite! Two thumbs up!

ta

I liked it... good entry, not to top heavy with more than one would want to know! any idea where the two different companies are located, so knife conasours (sp?) could travel there?

It's "connoisseur".

I love the entry
very interesting reading!
i did notice a typo, though, you put "wether" instead of "whether"
sorry, i can't remember where

I love the entry
very interesting reading!
i did notice a typo, though, you put "wether" instead of "whether"
sorry, i can't remember where #
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i always thought whether was spelled wether. guess that's the things that happen to beings not having been reared in english

you learn a new thing every day
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Excellent entry schurem!

In my Opinion this is ready for a scout to pick and I'd guess one will be along shortly....

Z.

i agree
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why thanks guys, i'm just a new guy you know

Drop the "es" in for .

Some comments:

1. I don't understand the title "the tool that could". Is this intended as a joke or was it cut off as you typed it?

2. You should use capitals for Swiss and lowercase for army knife. You have a mixture of capitals and lowercase throughout the article.

3. There's no apostrophe in its when you mean "belonging to it".

4. Remove the first reference to Victorinox and Wenger, then remove the phrase "As said before".

5. French, German and American should also have capital letters.

6. "very useless" should be "useless"

7. "wheight" should be "weight"

8. "technofobiac" should be "technophobiac".

9. I think the name "tweezers" is more suitable than "pincer" for the tool for picking up tiny things.

Hello,

While "Swiss" should always be capitalized, I think "Swiss Army Knife" is also correct since it's a brand name, without the Swiss though, "army knife" should not be capitalized.

Interestingly enough, Victorinox has been marketing a new Swiss army knife for IT people called the Cybertool. It has a bunch of interchangable screwdriver tips, a plastic thing for moving dip switches, and a translucent red case. No magnifying glass though.

Yours,
Jake