h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: The Village of Poling in West Sussex - A4087118
Author: superjimlad - U1486306

Well this is me writing about where I live cant get much more simple but I thought I would make my first go at an attempt something I know about.

Trust me Poling is even more dull than is put forward in this description but i was being kind.

Hopes its up to scratch
yours Jim

Hello superjimlad, welcome back to Peer Review

Here are a few typo's I picked up:

Poling is a small quiet village, which has few facilities to speak of apart form
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from



The hub of this industrious village is the farms
(are you sure you mean *industrious*? That means busy...maybe a better description would be *sleepy*)
The hub of this industrious village is the farms
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are the farms



situated near the coastal town of Worthing, In truth
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in truth



Poling is fortunate enough to have several picturesque ponds doted
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dotted



Poling is fortunate enough to have several picturesque ponds dotted throughout it where maly
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many



Poling is fortunate enough to have several picturesque ponds dotted throughout it where many different form
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forms



formed part of the countries defences in the Second World War
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country's



Christopher Robin lived in a 17th century house
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17th Century



Peckham's farm
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Peckham's Farm



There are two ways to get to Poling one is to walk from wherever you may be this is likely to be long and tiring with little real sense of achievement once you arrive.
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There are two ways to get to Poling: one is to walk from wherever you may be; this is likely to be long and tiring with little real sense of achievement once you arrive.



The other far more sensible option of driving there along to only road that can get you to Poling can be achieved by either hitching a ride or investing in a motor vehicle.
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The other, far more sensible, option of driving there along the only road that can get you to Poling, can be achieved by either hitching a ride or investing in a motor vehicle.



The road itself, the A 27,
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A27



the road actually goes straight through the village but seeing as no one lives on the much smaller part of poling which is on the north side of the road this causes no problems.
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The road actually goes straight through the village but as no-one lives on the much smaller part of Poling, which is on the north side of the road, this causes no problems.



coming off the A 27.
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A27.

The main one being called Poling Street is about a mile long windy and has most of the houses in.
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The main street is a bendy one called Poling Street, which is about a mile long, and has most of the houses on it.



The next sentence along contains two "A 27" which should be "A27"



In terms of purchasable food there is none it is suggested you pack a big lunch beforehand or even a picnic as Poling is a lovely place for them
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In terms of purchasable food there are no outlets. It is suggested you pack a big lunch beforehand or even a picnic as Poling is a lovely place for them.



Poling is again rather limited in place to stay
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places



unless you know someone with a room to spair
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spare



Poling may not be the big city
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a big city



simple ness
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simpleness



Good work, superjimlad, keep it up!

I think this has the makings of a fascinating Entry.

Initial thoughts: Origin of the name 'Poling' (I suspect it might be Saxon)

Also there is the potential for some links e.g. Several Entries on Radar e.g. A591545

Entry on Pooh sticks at A246188.

Is it worth mentioning Hammerpot Brewery?

http://www.hammerpot-brewery.co.uk/

Hi jimlad - I've also got typos and so on. I've tried to leave them out if Annie's already mentioned them, but there are a few duplicates:

"which has few facilities to speak of apart form a historical Norman church, a phone box and two post boxes."

"historical" -> "historic"


"The hub of this industrious village is the farms that surround it, however it is not just your average farms found there, no there are cattle farms and there is also a mushroom factory."

->

The hub of this industrious village are the farms that surround it, however it is not just your average farms found there. There are cattle farms and there is also a mushroom factory."

Cattle farms sound like fairly abverage farms to me.

"The most locally famous thing about Poling is the brand new Children’s Hospice which is often thought of as being situated near the coastal town of Worthing, In truth the hospice is inside Poling boundaries."

-> "...of Worthing. In truth, the hospice..."

I know that feeling. I'm from Solihull, and everyone thinks that Birmingham Airport and the NIA are in Birmingham, but they're not, they're in Solihull. Back on topic-

"wild life" -> "wildlife"

"There are several historical features of Poling; one is that the fields were once home to a massive radar array which formed part of the countries defences in the Second World War. Due to this there are AA positions and Pill boxes located around the village. The famous author A.A.Millne and Christopher Robin lived in a 17th century house in the easternmost part of Poling. A swan on the lake by the house was named Hopper swan by A.A.Millne and was featured in one of the Winnie the Pooh books."

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"There are several historical features in Poling. The fields were once home to a massive radar array which formed part of the country's defences in the Second World War. As a result of this, there are AAAnti-aircraft. positions and Pill boxes located around the village. Also, the famous author A.A. Milne, creator of Winnie the Pooh, and his son Christopher Robin lived in a 17th Century house in the easternmost part of Poling. A swan on the lake by the house was named Hopper swan by Milne and was featured in one of the Winnie the Pooh books."

Also, I'm not sure that "Pill box" should be capitalised. Anyone know?

"In terms of purchasing anything in Poling you are limited in the extreme, you can buy eggs from Peckham’s farm, which are very good but that is about it. You should definitely stock up well before you arrive."

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"In terms of purchasing anything in Poling, you are limited in the extreme. It is possible to buy eggs from Peckham’s farm, which are very good but that is about it. You should definitely stock up well before you arrive."

Perhaps you could tell us where the locals buy things then?

If no one lives on the north side of the road, why is the village there? Are there a few people living there?


I like the entry, jimlad! My only other suggestion is that it would be great if you could give us an idea of how many people live there, but I appreciate that this may be tricky!

Lots of good comments already

In the first paragraph you say "The hub of this industrious village is the farms that surround it..."

A hub is something that is in the centre, so you could say that the village is the hub of the farms that surround it. If you mean that the village only exists to serve the farms around it then you might like to rewrite the sentence to reflect that.

"however it is not just your average farms found there, no there are cattle farms and there is also a mushroom factory"
I presume by average farms you mean ones that focus on arable farming (growing cereals etc). It would probably be better to rewrite this bit to say:
cattle farming takes place around the village as well as arable farming, and there is even a mushroom farm.

Looking good though Well done!

Looks good to me

Post again when you've sorted out those corrections, and I'll have a proper read. Good job so far though!

Thanks for all the help
I am working my way through it all and will re post when i have done so

yours Jimlad

superjimlad, you don't have to remove your entry from Peer Review while you work on it.

That resets the clock, it'll need another 7 days to incubate now.

I suggest you make the changes suggested above, then resubmit to Peer Review, and leave it thereyou can carry on updatingand eventually it'll be on theFront Page, all being well!

Annie (if you need any help with your Guide ML, shout on this thread, won't you? We'll all stay subscribed I'm sure)

Thanks i will remember that in future.
jim

when i try to put it into guide GuideML it says
You are now editing: Error in GuideML

and the last paragraph looks like this

P>Poling may not be a big city; it may not even be a small one but what it lacks in function it makes up for in pure simpleness. You can go there on a summer’s day and totally forget yourself just exploring and walking. A truly remarkable place.
Bad closing element BODY expecting P


What should i do?
jim

Somewhere in the middle it loks as though you have got an opening without a closing one:

The church is also of historical note, the location of it is perculiar in that it can only be reached

In terms of purchasing anything in Poling you are limited in the extreme, you can buy eggs from Peckham’s Farm, which are very good but that is about it. You should definitely stock up well before you arrive.

Try putting in the after reached (and then finish that paragraph!) and see if it is a bit happier

Thanks thats sorted it

Jim

My trick to sort this problem out is, whilst in 'Edit' mode I put a space after every .

In this way I can easily see if I've omitted either a or a

It's back in PR everyone

Thank you all for you help i am sooo chuffed that its in , thanks again jim