h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: University of Wisconsin, La Crosse - A3942092
Author: Drasken - U1512348

My first submission, so I hope that this is a step in the right direction.
-Draz

It certainly looks to be going in the right direction to me .

Could you add to the introduction to explain why the University of Wisconsin would be a good place to go to?

Amy

First, I would encourage you to offer alternative distance in kilometers.

Second, in the computer use section
"(one Ethernet outlet for each resident and every student receives a free University E-mail Account upon admission." you did not close the parentheses

3rd, "Until this year (2004-2005), this was" just cut out the "this year" so it will never be time specific...so "until the 2004-2005 academic year..."

4th, "The Tower also plays the campus fight song and alma mater at randomly during the day." -at

5th, "as the "Brick Dick"." period inside quotes.

6th, "Once inside the Dining Center, you may help yourself tray and utensils and dig in" 'to a tray...'

7th,

oops, accidentally hit 'post'

7th, "You can eat a full meal with a drink for around 7.39." specify currency

8th, "Fayze’s is a nice, quiet sit-down restaraunt" *restaurant


all together it's a nice article and would be good for the guide

Cheers,
The Professor
Bolivia

Thank you taking the time to read my entry, Professor. I have made the appropriate corrections to the article, as suggested.

Thanks for reading, Amy. I'm still not sure myself why the University of Wisconsin would be a good place to go. I had to do something after High School, and I remember looking through a number of brochures for degree granting institutions, but it was all a bit of a blur after that. Still, I have taken your suggestion into account and have added a small blurb at the beginning of the entry.

we have to remember that the guide is an encyclopedia more or less. You can have an article on nazi germany, but the article won't be written in such a way so as to persuade you to become a nazi

The Professor
Bolivia

Yea I agree with the Professor, otherwise good entry

The author has elvised - flea market?

Yes, to the flea market with it.