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Peer Review: A3247931 - News teases

Post 1

Gonzoid

Entry: News teases - A3247931
Author: Gonzoid - U203517

Thoughts?


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Post 2

Gnomon - time to move on

Not bad. smiley - smiley But a little short. Can you think of any famous teases that were used in national newspapers?


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Post 3

Gonzoid

It's geared more towards television news teases. I'll monkey with it a bit to see if I can make that point more clear.

Thanks!


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Post 4

Skankyrich [?]

I agree that it's great but a little short; the adding a section on newspaper teases is a good idea. You made me think a lot about todays headline in the Daily Ma*l; "A PHONE MAST BY EVERY SCHOOL".

I think by expanding this article and widening its focus you have an excellent article on your hands here!

smiley - cool


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Post 5

Gonzoid

Thanks, all. I'm working on expanding it a bit to include some newspaper. It might be a bit thin, since my work has been mostly in television tease writing.

I'm working on it. Your advice is helping.

Ta!

Gonz'


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Post 6

Mikey the Humming Mouse - A3938628 Learn More About the Edited Guide!

Still working on this, Gonzoid?


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Post 7

AlexAshman


Is Gonzoid still here? smiley - erm


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Post 8

Skankyrich [?]

*starts playing a certain Queen bassline*

smiley - smiley


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Post 9

AlexAshman


And another one gone...


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Post 10

Skankyrich [?]

It's a shame, really, it's got the basis of a good entry but just needed a bit of widening to cover different areas. I guess it'll just end up at the bottom of the fleamarket in about six months though smiley - sadface

smiley - cheers


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Post 11

AlexAshman


Yep - fleamarket is where this one will be going. smiley - sadface

You never know, someone might pick it up - if not I might pick it up myself someday. smiley - smiley


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Post 12

Skankyrich [?]

It's exactly that 'someday' that gets to me once in a while, you know? There are so many worthwhile entries sat in FM that could easily be taken on, polished up and sent on their way but never are smiley - sadface

I really hope this gets plucked from there and has that little bit of work done on it, because it will be worthwhile with a bit of work.

smiley - cheers


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Post 13

AlexAshman


It's a similar someday to the 'I hope someday you'll join us, and the world will live as one'. Will someday ever come? smiley - erm


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Post 14

Skankyrich [?]

We'll live as one, for a quick post and then be off....

Would be more appropriate. At least Nighthoover said he was going smiley - biggrin

smiley - cheers


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Post 15

AlexAshman


Maybe, but it doesn't fit the song...

I think nighthoover has gone - all there are nowadays are 'false prophets'.


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Post 16

Skankyrich [?]

smiley - erm *knowing he'll spend at least the next three days trying to find a lyric that fits*

smiley - cheers


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Post 17

AlexAshman


smiley - musicalnoteImagine there's no one-post wonders...smiley - musicalnote

Nope - that doesn't fit...

*turns attention back to PR*


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Post 18

Skankyrich [?]

Oh, yes, PR....


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Post 19

AlexAshman



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Post 20

Skankyrich [?]



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smiley - biggrin


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