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Peer Review: A87788821 - Soft Play Centres

Post 1

Bluebottle

Entry: Soft Play Centres - A87788821
Author: Bluebottle - U43530

Is it possible for Bluebottle to write an entry that is under 1,000 words? Here is his doomed attempt to find out!

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Elektragheorgheni -Please read 'The Post'

Hey BB, I really liked this. I thought it followed the mini-skirt rule--long enough to cover the subject and short enough to be interesting. And not one mention of the sainted isle! Bravo.smiley - applause


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Dmitri Gheorgheni - Freshly Vaccinated

I love it! >Shoes are sometimes asked to be handed in to members of staff, like in bowling alleys.<<

While I find the idea of asking the shoes delightfully surreal, I think you should say something like, 'Visitors are sometimes asked to hand in their shoes...'

Explain what a 'Wendy House' is? I know the Peter Pan reference, but have no idea what that would be like in a play area.

>>Most provide tea and cakes<<

Well, in the UK, I imagine they provide tea. I'll bet a hat they don't in the US, whether it's going to be coffee or soft drinks. Tea is going to be a styrofoam cup of hot water and a teabag. smiley - whistle

I'll leave it to the parents to weigh in on the supervision issue.

Now, where's that bouncy castle? smiley - boing


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Post 4

Geggs

That pretty much covers it! Did you cone in under the word limit?

There's just one nit I would pick. The sentence:

Be aware that some soft play centres charge for adult admission as well as children.

Presupposes that the reader knows that these places generally only charge for the children, which could probably do with being explicitly mentioned, I think.

Our current favourite (our boys are 3 and 6) is an old car showroom, rather than the usual industrial unit.


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Post 5

Bluebottle

Wendy house is now explained in a footnote.
It's under 1,000 words at the moment, but that'll depend on if there are many suggested amendments.

This article is based on my experience of visiting over 15 different soft play centres all across the UK, from the Isle of Wight to Hampshire, Berkshire and Yorkshire, with my kids. And in case you wondered, I have selflessly, in the name of research, been down every big bumpy slide in every soft play centre I have visited, except for one (where they didn't let adults on the play equipment. Curiously enough, we've not been back to that one...)

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Post 6

Dmitri Gheorgheni - Freshly Vaccinated

<rofl. So all this equipment is Bluebottle-tested?


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Post 7

Bluebottle

As a responsible adult I have a duty to ensure that the soft play centres are safe for my children by going down the slides and playing with the toys...

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Post 8

Dr Anthea - ah who needs to learn things... just google it!

I often find it is useful to call the play area before we go to make sure they are not booked for a party that day to try and limit the chaos


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Post 9

Florida Sailor All is well with the world

Very good!

I notice that you mention taking off shoes twice in the same paragraph, you might want to drop one of them.

Soft play areas are provided at many fast food outlets around here, most notably Mc Donalds (not trying to sneak in an advert) I have never seen a charge to use them but pay token machines are common, as well as number of arcade and board games (such as air hockey and foosball) available to consume them.

We also have some 'hands-on' museums that offer a soft play area.

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Post 10

Bluebottle

I've added all the excellent points raised, but now the article is 1,020 words long!smiley - wah
Well, it was under a thousand for almost a day...

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Post 11

sprout

They are a reasonable option for parties as well, although crowding can indeed be a problem.

They often have loud music, which is a bit of a pain.

Things to watch out for include the mix of ages - as you say BB, the slides for younger kids are often rubbish, so you get all ages in the main part, which can be a bit of a recipe for disaster.

sprout


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Post 12

Bluebottle

smiley - whistlesmiley - musicalnoteLoud music – good point, Sprout, I've added 'Noise' onto the list of things found at a typical soft play centre, and after a bit of a trim, it's back down to 979 words.smiley - wow

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Post 14

Bluebottle

smiley - wowThanks everyone - last one down the slide's a rotten smiley - friedegg!

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Dmitri Gheorgheni - Freshly Vaccinated

Wheee! smiley - applausesmiley - run


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Well done!! smiley - applause


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Post 17

Geggs

As long as it's not a rotten Geggs, I'm fine with that. smiley - winkeye

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