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Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor Started conversation Oct 5, 2013
Entry: Warhammer 40k - The Imperium of Man - A87767662
Author: Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor - U1314679
The central race of Warhammer 40k.
A87767662 - Warhammer 40k - The Imperium of Man
Gnomon - time to move on Posted Oct 21, 2013
The Imperium of Man
"But real understanding is covered by rites and the believe in a spirit of the machine. " -- covered is not the right word here. I think what you mean is:
But real understanding has been replaced by rites and the belief in a spirit of the machine.
By humans the Emperor is worsipped like a god. -- the word order is wrong here. Try:
The Emperor is worshipped by humans like a god.
or
The Emperor is worshipped like a god by humans.
does not only contain usual soldiers -->
not only contains usual soldiers
"The Elite choices are ranging in the average with sharpshooters and psykers and their own special Rambo character: Marbo."
I have absolutely no idea what you mean by "ranging in the average".
The design of the Imperial Guard is oriented on various historic armies. -- try changing "oriented" to "based".
the remaining Space Marine legions were parted into Chapters -- try "divided" rather than "parted".
Their ranged attack skills --> Their long-range attack skills
It is parted in three major orders --> It is divided into three major orders
A87767662 - Warhammer 40k - The Imperium of Man
Secretly Not Here Any More Posted Oct 21, 2013
Same comments as the others - great work.
Definitely needs a picture of an iconic Space Marine though!
A87767662 - Warhammer 40k - The Imperium of Man
Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor Posted Oct 21, 2013
Thanks a lot to both of you for all your comments and for reading the whole series!
A87767662 - Warhammer 40k - The Imperium of Man
Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor Posted Oct 24, 2013
I've corrected these things!
As for the photo: we have Space Wolves and some unpainted Dark Angels.
Guess I'll also finally have to start painting daemons...
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