h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Discus - A87727017
Author: Nosebagbadger {Ace} - U14077177

This is the 2nd of my 8 entries for my field event uni project, sheet found here A87725109
I have been told to enter as each one is finished - please combine when all eight have been finished

Ideas for links would be appreciated

Could I take the opportunity to subtitle this forum?

"Discus, discuss."

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Yeah, and if conversation stagnates in the other I'll have to put a shot in their arm

Don't Long Jump to conclusions, now.

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Hey don't throw hammers in your greenhouse

Anyone willing to do a type check, I think it was Lanza who did the first set for Shot Put, (if not, please comment to correct me) but I need my mistakes pointing out in glaring detail for discus :D

Yes, it would be really helpful if anyone else could lend a hand here, please.

I do think the title needs expanding though. Could it be more like

"The Discus Athletic Event." ? I am not a sportswoman, I am not even sure of the definition of Athletics v Track events.

track events are all the running ones, sprints, endurance, hurdles et al

Field are the throwing ones, discus, shot put, hammer etc

I can see an extension of title being neccesary, but i'm not sure what to

Well, you've already cleared up one misapprehension I had.

How about "The Discus Field Event, from History to the Present Day."

Too lengthy? (i'm not sure)

How about

The Discus Field Event...........

Something to be put in, ideas please, I will come back after lunch and a maths lesson

This is an interesting and quite comprehensive article. I particularly liked the stories about the discus throwers themselves..

Can I suggest some changes to improve the flow?

* In the sentence beginning ' the discus should trail', it might be clearer to put a full stop after 'possible' and start a new sentence.

* To me the phrase 'the arm should release at 30-35 degrees" suggests flying arms! Do you mean 35 degrees from the body? If so, how about replacing this sentence with 'The discus should be released when the arm is between 30 and 35 degrees from the body.'

*I found the sentence beginning 'Unlike some sports' a bit hard to follow, but I think it only needs commas after 'sports' and after 'levels'.

* The sentence 'History abounds with the discus' would be improved if you added 'references to' after 'abounds with'.

* The sentence beginning 'Which given that the Iliad' gets tangled somewhere. I would suggest 'As the Iliad and Odyssey had great influence on the Ancient Greek way of living and morality, the inclusion of sports, particularly visually impressive ones like discus, indicates how important they were in the ancient world.'

* To me 'female throwing event' sounds like domestic violence! I would suggest 'the only throwing event in which they could compete'.

*I would avoid the three uses of 'teammate' in the sentence beginning 'Behind his teammate'. I would suggest 'Although he was trailing for most of his throws, his teammate...' You might then want to start a new sentence after 'throws'.

I hope this helps.

In the sentence beginning ' the discus should trail', it might be clearer to put a full stop after 'possible' and start a new sentence.
DONE
* To me the phrase 'the arm should release at 30-35 degrees" suggests flying arms! Do you mean 35 degrees from the body? If so, how about replacing this sentence with 'The discus should be released when the arm is between 30 and 35 degrees from the body.'
Your arms don't fly? But DONE
I found the sentence beginning 'Unlike some sports' a bit hard to follow, but I think it only needs commas after 'sports' and after 'levels'.
Your comments don't quite match up with what is written, but i think i grasp what you say. DONE
* The sentence 'History abounds with the discus' would be improved if you added 'references to' after 'abounds with'.
DONE
The sentence beginning 'Which given that the Iliad' gets tangled somewhere. I would suggest 'As the Iliad and Odyssey had great influence on the Ancient Greek way of living and morality, the inclusion of sports, particularly visually impressive ones like discus, indicates how important they were in the ancient world.'
Altered, but DONE
me 'female throwing event' sounds like domestic violence! I would suggest 'the only throwing event in which they could compete'.
I feel that would increase the difficulty of domestic violence, but DONE
I would avoid the three uses of 'teammate' in the sentence beginning 'Behind his teammate'. I would suggest 'Although he was trailing for most of his throws, his teammate...' You might then want to start a new sentence after 'throws'.
Different, but DONE

massive influence fon any ancient Greek's way of living and their morality...

Just stray type on third word up there.

I really liked this entry. It was interesting and the personalities of the participants made it fun. Humans can weaponize anything but that really must pack a wallop to have such a safeguarded enclosure.


Thanks for contributing such an interesting Olympics article.

woohoo, somebody like me (or in absence of that, my entry)

I'll fix it later today...after four hours of recording the same two songs

Done, very boring hours as well

Have we managed to overlook this somehow?

Is it ready to roll, so to speak?

Actually, in your sentence on current records, you say:
'74.08m and 76.80m by Jürgen Schult and Gabriele Reinsch respectively'.
Is that the right way round?

I'll check,
I actually managed to forget about it myself - my other entries on this project have a similar layout, and a couple have been picked, so tracking them is slightly difficult