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Entry: test entry - A87709693
Author: beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep beeb beep - U212656

Please ignore this, I'm testing something for the gurus.

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I think this is a little repetitous to be honest, and R2D2's accent wasn't at all like that.

It's too short and as I'm not ignoring it it's not factual either. Plus you use the first person.

I think we've had a few more Test Entries before. Please see if you could not ask the curators to update one of those if you feel they are incomplete.

I think this is an excellent literary entry and must be included in the Guide Immediately.

I quite like this, but it could do with some work.

Your Entry title needs to be capitalised - we refer to Edited Guide Entries as 'Entries' rather than 'entries'. Since this will ultimately make it into the Edited Guide, it would save the Subeditors some time if you changed this aspect now.

First person references are a no, no. Perhaps you could look at a way of using 'This Researcher' rather than 'I'm'.

The Gurus are important people. They should be capitalised as well.

I find some of the work a little clunky. It'd be nice to see it a little snappier in places. Maybe rework the opening sentence? I'm thinking along the lines of "Please, ignore this." I think that'll help to draw the readers attention and pique their interest.

So, in summary, I'd suggest this: Please, ignore this. This Researcher is testing something for the Guru's.

Finally, welcome to h2g2 and to PeerReview. It's good to see new talent joining us.

Testing something for the Guru's what, DDD?

Thanks for the great feedback everyone I've made some amendments as suggested (I especially like the addition of a comma after 'Please').

Anything else?

I suggest replacing the comma after "ignore this" with a colon or a semicolon, because what follows ("the Gurus are testing...") is some sort of explanation of why the reader should ignore this.

I think a colon or semi colon would imply that they should ignore the sentence "the Gurus are testing something". Which I don't want them to do. A fullstop might work. Then the first sentence is giving instructions to ignore, and the object of that is implicit (ignore the entry).

I think a fullstop would work best... and I love the new title, really snappy and eye-catching.

You see, this is a classic example of PeerReview working at its very best. What was originally a fairly mediocre submission has now been transformed into something quite stunning.

It's not there yet, but it's very close.

P.S. I bet this gets a Blob.

I think there is a spelling mistake in the second paragraph; and a missing comma. Asides that it was a very enjoyable read, if a little on the short side still... maybe a second on history of it all?

Comma changed to fullstop.

a blob would be cool.

I'll have a think about the history, that could really round things out.

Do we need an explanation of who the Gurus are and what they do ?

History could cover things like low quality attempts to copy The Guide that allow anybody to update the information, and how this concept is flawed.

Footnotes would be good.

This is a poor entry in my view, I realise that conciseness can be appreciated but it shouldn't be at the loss of relevant detail.

Is there sufficent humour? I'm not certain.

Humour is not a pre-requisite, though, is it? And I'm not convinced we've lost any relevant detail.

This Entry explains fully what it set out to do. We, as readers, are expected to ignore it. Then we are given a full explanation as to why.

It's beautifully-crafted, succint, factual and relevant.

I'd recommend a pick.

Oh for gods sake. This is what is wrong with PR. Someone puts in all this effort and then gets totally undermined by some late comer who thinks they know it all.