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Entry: Rita Hayworth - A8187483
Author: Opticalillusion- what do you think of this -->A7497651 ? - U231227

In line with the Vogue product here is Hayworth

Hey,

I must admit i had never heard of this person before.Your article looks like a good start. It is however a bit hard to read as it is. Maybe add some subheadings and split it into smaller paragraphs, especially that last part. maybe some bullet points of the musicals she was in.

Hope this helps. good work

SI

Are you working on this entry, Opti?

"at this time she started suffering from Alzheimer's Disease. Her last film was 1972 The Wrath of God and she made a well- publicised appearance on The Carol Burnett Show towards the end of her career. In 1980 Hayworth was diagnosed from suffering from Alzheimer's disease"

needs sorting.

Not bad...

Just: "...also pushed her through electrolysis believing that by raising her hairline she would appear more beautiful. Columbia finally... undertaking electrolysis to raise her hairline."

It reads as if her early career was marked by electrolysis. Or did you just mix up the phrases during editing?

SAUSAGE

Speaking of electrolysis... How'd ya raise hairline by electrolysis?

(I am imagining a 50's style lab - big knobs and electric sparks - with a bathtub, rita in it, and electrodes around her head... And of course a mad-hairdresser rubbing his hands and squeaking with a fake German accent: Eeee-GOR, more Energy)

This may be completely tangential, but the only time I've ever heard of Rita Hayworth before was in connection to the film "The Shawshank Redemption". That being because Stephen King's original short story upon which the film is based is called "Rita Hayworth and the Shawshank Redemption", and the first poster that Tim Robbins' character gets to hide the tunnel out of his cell is of Rita Hayworth.


Geggs

I was going to say that it might be good to give a mention of the film / story, because it underlines her popularity as a pin up.

I'm sure the "house style" police will be along soon to talk about style, grammar and so on (since that is their job ) but for now I'll say - nice entry!

(I knew she was an actress, but I hadn't realised she was a dancer first - that would explain her fantastic legs)

Bit off subject but on the news today there was an item about her ex being jailed for fraud- - - - karma?!

Where did the elctrolysis part go?

This Entry reads nicely now... What happened...

HELL

you two the current PR thread is here though F48874?thread=5986816

Electrolysis in there Hell ...one of the first paragraphs

Pleased to hear you find it reads well ...time has passed and with time experience...