h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Cross Dressing - A816617
Author: Mark the improbably and reasonably sane - U195434

Dont be shy out there .

Tell me what you think!!!!!

Does this effect you?

Hi, I see this is your first guide entry, welcome to h2g2. This is a good start on an interesting topic.

Just a couple of points...
It does need to be in first person for the Edited Guide, there's a bit of first person in here.

Have you thouht of puting it in Guide ML?

It would make it clearer and easier to read, have a look at the guide ML Clinic at A187229 and see what you make of it.

your right, so I've tweaked it a bit.
Thanks.

Also I'm utter rubbish with GML!!!!!
One day, one day

not bad, but it seems a bit mixed up and jumps about a bit.

you seem quite ready to intermix different aspects indescriminantly.

this could really do with a bit of structure in it.

for example:

something about cross dressing being people wearing the clothing of the opposite sex.

then something to do with the mens liberation idea, zyra covers this and provides lots of links on his page http://www.zyra.org.uk/sk4men.htm ).

then something about transvestites (which you correctly point out obscurely is different from both mens lib and homosexuality) and again zyra covers this and provides lots of links on his page http://www.zyra.org.uk/tranny.htm

from there you then need to go on to cover transexuals, who are aspiring to various levels of gender reassignment.

if you reformulate your article into something like this with a steady progression of ideas (fitting the other stuff in where appropriate) then this would probably improve it a lot.

as I said, not bad, but it needs structure.