h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

This is not a power grab, we don't you want to take over h2g2 for your own reasons.

Is that:

This is not a power grab, we don't want to take over h2g2 for our own reasons.

I have no idea what it is, I was told to write it so I wrote it.

These are just suggestions, Tavaron, like a peer review thread.


h2g2 is notable for passionate members of the site who want to have a say in how things are run and are frustrated at that lack of opportunity; this way everybody has a say. After years of complaining, why not take charge? There's so much we can do! Never again need the community feel sidelined by the powers that be.

I think HN is correct, it looks like a typo to me.

Yes, it's a typo - it should be 'for our own reasons'.

ok, changed it

Thank you

Thanks for all your great work

Sorry, I didn't do that last set of copy-editing very well. Here, I try again.


h2g2 is notable for passionate members of the site who want to have a say in how things are run and are frustrated at that lack of opportunity, this way every has a say.

Long sentence and every needs a noun.

h2g2 is notable for passionate members of the site who want to have a say in how things are run and are frustrated at that lack of opportunity. Every member has a say in the running of a community-led site.



You've been complaining for all these years -why not take charge?

It puts the reader on the defensive.]

After years of complaining, why not take charge?



Never again with the community feel sidelined by the by the powers that be.

With is probably not the right word, and by the is repeated.

Never again need the community feel sidelined by the powers that be.

I'm sorry for giving you such poor quality copy. I would be happy just to delete that sentance altogether.

delete which one?

'After years of complaining, why not take charge? There's so much we can do! Never again need the community feel sidelined by the powers that be. '

done

This sentence is still not right:

This is not a power grab, we don't you want to take over h2g2 for our own reasons.

I think 'you' should be deleted:

This is not a power grab, we don't want to take over h2g2 for our own reasons.

This statement sounds like we don't want donations:

We had an overwhelming offer of donations at first but we hope that we would be able to get going without having to raise a large amount of money.

If we change the 'but' to 'so' and add 'additional' it sounds more like we would be happy to accept financial support for the reading pleasure and intellectual stimulation we provide.

We had an overwhelming offer of donations at first, so we hope that we would be able to get going without having to raise a large amount of additional money.

I'll shut up now. I have a kitty-cat to rescue.

Great work HN - thanks for spotting all that, I am an awful proof reader.

My mom was an editor. She used to give me copy to edit.

Which reminds me, there has got to be a much better way of editing, in the futuristic h2g2 of my dreams...

changed again

If you are bored some day I can send you the Entry about North American houses of the ... well, say 16th to 18th Century, I think 19th would get too much... that I just try to write. I think it's terrible so far.

I can edit other people's writing, but not my own. I just found out that was because proof reading uses a different area of the brain to writing, and reading for meaning.

"we don't want to take over h2g2 for our own reasons"

Hmmm... Say what?

If we, i.e. the community or the committee, do not want to take over h2g2 for our own reasons, then what the heck for?

Perhaps I misunderstand, not being a native Islander (U.K. national) and all, but my impression we would LIKE to take over h2g2 BECAUSE :
*** We want h2g2 to continue to exist in a way we are comfortable with

To me that is OUR reason for wanting to take over, even if no-one else wants it.

So, maybe I am putting too much emphasis on details, I tend to do that sometimes.


Cheers!
Martin
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Dirt!
Now I know why I miss the "Edit my own post" button. To continue :

The line after "we don't want to take over h2g2 for our own reasons" actually rephrases this statement with a positive twist.

In My Humble Opinion - Which Can Be Loud Sometimes, these two lines could be rewritten like this:

"We are not trying to take over h2g2 regardless but instead we offer a backup plan to ensure the survival of the site if no other reasonable solution is presented.

If we would take over h2g2 we would run it as a democracy in the interests of all the users."

Just mumbling along...

Cheers!
Martin
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