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Peer Review : A80725566 - Shanaze Reade - Racing Legend

Post 1

Mags

Entry: Shanaze Reade - Racing Legend - A80725566
Author: Mags - U14762593

Hey, 

This is my another entry about Shanaze Reade. Please have a look and let me know your thoughts. Thank you in advance!

Mags


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Post 2

Vip

Hi Mags,

smiley - biro"In July 2007 she became at the UCI Track World Championships… "
--> what did she become?

Aside from that, I'm mostly curious as to how you pronounce her first name!

smiley - fairy


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Post 3

Mags

Thanks! That's been rectified. smiley - smiley
Hope you like it now.


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Post 4

Lanzababy - Guide Editor

Hi Mags,

smiley - sorry I seem to have missed reading this Entry until now!

It reads very well, thanks for submitting it. You obviously have a love for BMX.


My only little observation is that to put a final polish on the Entry you should alter this bit:

>>>>
“I have to bring a picture of my brother and sister, and a lucky charm from my mum.”

to

'I have to bring a picture of my brother and sister, and a lucky charm from my mum.'

ie write your quote in italics, and use single ['] not double quotemarks ["]


Great stuff! smiley - ok

Lanzababy smiley - zen

Scout


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Post 5

Mags

Done!!smiley - smiley
Please, let me know if it is oksmiley - smiley

Best wishes,
Mags


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Post 6

Lanzababy - Guide Editor

Hi Mags,

I think you've finished this now. smiley - smiley The next question is - what are you going to write for the Guide now?


(We just have to sit and wait awhile for this Entry to be selected by the BBC Eds)


smiley - zen


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Post 7

Mags

Yay! I am so happysmiley - smiley

I think I have to create a kind of a strategy for myselfsmiley - smiley
I would like to focus on BMX and maybe travel as well as food as that's what I am really passionate about..

Hmm... let me think about it.

Thank you so much for all your help so far!


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Post 8

Vip

A pleasure. smiley - magic It's lovely to have a new person come along who is open to the process and is filling spots in the Guide that nobody has already written!

smiley - fairy


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Post 9

Vip

*checks out code* Your GuideML is pretty darn good too. smiley - ok Well done.

smiley - fairy


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Post 10

Gnomon - time to move on

Hi Mags. As someone who is not familiar with BMX and not from the UK, I think you could offer slightly more explanation.

I know this sounds like a stupid question, but what´s "Team GB"? Is it the team for Great Britain? Or is it for the whole of the UK?

Could you provide an explanation of what BMX is, perhaps in a single sentence. This could be put as a footnote by the subeditor if you don´t know how to do it.


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Post 11

The H2G2 Editors

Hi Mags. Terrific to have someone new writing here. Well done on what you've done so far and taking on board the suggestions. Let us know if you want to act on Gnomon's suggestion above, or if you need help creating footnotes.

We just wanted to ask you about the title. Could you add in 'BMX Racing Legend' just to clarify it a bit? Also, we're open to suggestions on this, but is it a bit previous to call someone who's only been cycling professionally since the mid 2000s and is still currently active a 'legend'? But thanks again for taking the plunge. smiley - ok


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Post 12

The H2G2 Editors

Hi Mags, jut a quick nudge to see how you're getting on with this. Let us know if you need any help smiley - ok


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Post 13

the_jon_m - bluesman of the parish

saying she's aged 22 -- that'll date a bit quickly - something to keep an eye on

Also, I agree with the Eds, she has not been racing for really long enough to be called a legend, especially when her major race resulted him her crashing out


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Post 14

The H2G2 Editors

Thinking that this needs a tincy wincy bit more work before going in. Mags, what do you reckon? smiley - ok


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Post 15

Vip

Unfortunately Mags hasn't been seen since her last post in this thread. smiley - sadface

smiley - fairy


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Post 16

Lanzababy - Guide Editor

Which is a damned shame. BMX is an Olympic sport.

http://www.london2012.com/cycling-bmx

I want to see both of her Entries in the Guide.


smiley - bigeyes


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Post 17

lil ~ Auntie Giggles with added login ~ returned


You might want to keep hold of them, as they make perfect examples of the writings of a Newbie. They could become one of the first to be fully edited by the new site smiley - ok


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Post 18

lil ~ Auntie Giggles with added login ~ returned


I agree with Lanzababy, one of our very talented sub-editors can polish this off smiley - smiley

lil x


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Post 20

lil ~ Auntie Giggles with added login ~ returned


Yay!! At last!!! smiley - cracker

Well done! smiley - applausesmiley - bubbly

Did our author manage to follow us across, are they lost in the eddies? smiley - erm


lil x


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