h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: What is the origin of vice? - A746309
Author: dwight - U193722

Here she is...

Hi dwight!

I suspect I am supposed to have read 'The Spartan System' before reading this. I haven't so it makes reviewing it more difficult.

Guide entries are supposed to be self standing. You can only link a guide entry to one that has been Edited. What happens if this one gets Edited and the other doesn't (or is Edited later)?

The entry asks questions it doesn't answer and pre-supposes knowledge on behalf of the reader. Who was Lycurgus? What does 'nomos' mean?

Having said that, I'm interested enough to go and look at the entry referred to.

I wonder whether this would work better as a University project?

What do others think?

as the other entry also need a load of ri-jigging then perhaps they can all be rescrambled together to get a uni project or a set iof entires along the lines of the japanese warrior ones or the microscopes ones.

faBT

what about a entry describing the sparta system. then one on vice, then one on....etc.

FABT

::Nods in agreement:: ... with the proviso that something is said about Lycurgus and the antecedents of the Spartan state.

NB: In its present state, this entry, although specific to Sparta, does not say so in the title, so a reader will be misled until s/he reads it.

When was the Aegis time, and what the heck is (79.)? Just out of curiosity...

The general comments have been made already, and I can only agree. Your fine entries demand a wiser 'readership' or a much more elaborate introduction... Be easier on your readers.

I have given similar comments in your other 'philosophical' entries. Think about an university-project...

HELL

of course, the other problem is that the entry isn't actually about the origin of vice, only it's role in the destruction of sparta.

Therefore, it would need renaming at minimum, and a major rewrite at worst.

Well, it has at least been renamed. And its partner entry (A745715) was submitted to PR, but has since been removed. Both entries are very interesting, so I do hope the author is still around. But, as said in this thread before, it makes sense to try and get the entry on Lycurgus' Sparta into the guide first.

I hoep dwight is still around...

doesn't seem so...

Maybe we should move this thread to the Entry and wait.

HELL