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Entry: Abraham Zapruder and his film of the JFK Assassination - A70490298
Author: Laces - U7952280

not from me - I reckon this is pretty much ready for selection. . .

Hey, since I'm a Scout, maybe I could pick it

No, on second thoughts, I better hadn't...

*giggles*

Technically, so could I

maybe I should get everyone to form an orderly queue?

Yes Ma'am

A powerful article. I wonder how many of us can still the impact in our mind's eye? Horrific stuff.

Horrific indeed, Cyclonic

As has already been stated, glad this is still going forward. It deserves a place in the EG.
Well done Lil for taking it on.

Please Scouts, can someone pick it soon

Websailor

Content:

Since the entry goes to the trouble of explaining the seating arrangement in the car, I'm trying to understand it. " The Governor of Texas, John B. Connally sat between Kellerman and the President on the right jump seat, with his wife Nellie on the left one." What's a "jump seat"? Were there three rows of seats in the car, and this was the middle row? Or is it a fold-down seat on the back of the driver seat?

James Tague was winged in the face -- I don't know this word 'winged'. Is it common? I presume it means "hit in the face".

The link to "magic bullet" - I think this link is seriously out of place. The entry is in the course of explaining what happened, and before it has even got to the main event, the bullet that killed Kennedy, it throws in the phrase "magic bullet" without explanation. Admittedly, the explanation is given in the next paragraph, but the reader's instinct is to follow the link. This brings us to an external page that discusses various alternative theories on what happened. We're not ready for these discussions at this point. A simple explanation of what the term "magic bullet" means is all that is needed here. If you want to link to that external page, it should be done later on, after the facts have been presented.

You say there were 354 frames, and 26.6 seconds of footage. Is this correct? That gives a frame rate of 13.3 frames per second. I thought that cine cameras used 24 frames per second.


Formatting etc:
22nd November 1963 --> 22 November, 1963 (two places)

8 mm film camera --> 8mm film camera

a mere fifty feet --> a mere 50 feet

John B. Connally -- remove the full stop

at the mouth of the Underpass --> at the mouth of the underpass (lower-case u)

the bullet’s impact -- there's a curly apostrophe there that should be changed to a straight one. Curly apostrophes display as large squares on some browsers.

Zapruder has a unrestricted view --> Zapruder has an unrestricted view

Forrest V. Sorrels --> Forrest V Sorrels

"sold both his films for ten thousand, so when Stolley's opening offer was twenty-five thousand dollars " -- numbers need to be converted to digits

was familiar with the White House having served Eisenhower -- this would be slightly clearer if a comma were inserted after House

$125,000 dollars -- no need for the word dollars here

Tippit's widow.6 --> Tippit's widow6. (that is, put the full stop after the rather than before the <FOOTNOTE&gt

"the story of the film itself had now passed beyond his control, a convoluted story that still continues today" -- the use of the word "story" twice jars slightly. Perhaps change the second one to "tale".

George H. W. Bush --> George HW Bush

Sunday 24th November, 1963 --> Sunday 24 November, 1963

That's all I could see.

Jump-seats are normally fixed to the back of driver's seats. In this instance they are a pair of fold-down seats which can be removed from the limousine when not in use.

'winged' = flesh wound.

Magic bullet link = removed.

Cine film. I found the following in IMDb.com =

>Zapruder captured the scene with a Model 414 PD Bell and Howell Zoomatic Director Series Camera that operated via a spring-wound mechanism, which filmed at an average frame rate of 18.3 frames per second, and recorded on Kodak Kodachrome II 8 mm movie safety film. The footage of the assassination itself runs for a total of 486 frames, or 26.6 seconds. Kennedy's limousine is visible in 343 of the frames, or 18.7 seconds.<
= I have noted the total frames in the first paragraph.

22nd November x 2 = amended to 22 November, 1963

8mm film camera
50 feet
John B. Connally = full stop removed
Underpass = underpass
Bullet's impact = curly apostrophe removed.
Added 'n' to >Zapruder has an unrestricted view<.
Removed full stop from Forrest V Sorrels.
Numbers converted to digits.
Comma added re: White House, while serving under Eisenhower.
The word dollar removed.
Tippit’s widow = Footnote amended to Oswald.
Story x 2 = changed 2nd to tale.
Full stops removed re: George HW Bush.
Th removed from Sunday 24th November, 1963.

Thanks Gnomon!

With those changes done, is everyone happy for this to be accepted for submission into the Guide now?

The changes have been done so good to go I reckon.


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Well done.

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Websailor