A Conversation for The Provinces Of Roman Britain

Edited Guide Writing Workshop: A69529701 - ENTRY 6 The Provinces Of Roman Britain 2730

Post 1

bobstafford

Entry: ENTRY 6 The Provinces Of Roman Britain 2730 - A69529701
Author: bobstafford - U3151547

Anyone care to look this over


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Post 2

Gnomon - time to move on

I think it is worth mentioning that two periods of prehistory are named after Celtic tribes, the Ordovician and the Silurian. "Silurian" is also a monster from Doctor Who.


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Post 3

bobstafford

Good point but where to fit it in??? Perhaps as a footnote.smiley - biggrin


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Post 4

bobstafford

I have put the informaation in as suggested in footnote form.

Please comment smiley - smiley


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Post 5

bobstafford

Any more ideas


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Post 6

Elentari

Hi Bob, sorry I've been so bad about looking at these as I promised.

Here are my thoughts:

The wording in the introduction is awkward. There are some run-on sentences and you use 'single province' too many times.

"There were 36 Provincial Governors of Britain from the date of invasion until the 207 AD division"

It may be worth explaining the role of a provincial governor.

"interestingly the average term of office was just 4.5 years. One the longest terms served in office was that of Quintus Antistius Adventus2 from 169 to 180 AD, a total of 11 years."

I would like to see you explain why the terms were so short - ie. they were high-flyers and got moved to other posts elsewhere.

You need to explain about client knigdoms.

You could also do with a concluding paragraph.


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Post 7

bobstafford

smiley - magicexcellent ideas I shal consider and amend smiley - cheers


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Post 8

bobstafford

Here are my thoughts:

The wording in the introduction is awkward. There are some run-on sentences and you use 'single province' too many times.
A streamlining ha been attempted comments pleasesmiley - smiley

"There were 36 Provincial Governors of Britain from the date of invasion until the 207 AD division"

It may be worth explaining the role of a provincial governor.
I have put in a basic outline of the powres.smiley - smiley

"interestingly the average term of office was just 4.5 years. One the longest terms served in office was that of Quintus Antistius Adventus from 169 to 180 AD, a total of 11 years."

I would like to see you explain why the terms were so short - ie. they were high-flyers and got moved to other posts elsewhere.
I am working on it smiley - winkeye

You need to explain about client knigdoms.
I have had an attempt at this smiley - smiley


You could also do with a concluding paragraph.
I am looking for ideas smiley - erm

comments pleasesmiley - smiley


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Post 9

bobstafford


I would like to see you explain why the terms were so short - ie. they were high-flyers and got moved to other posts elsewhere.
I think that coveres it smiley - smiley


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Post 10

bobstafford

You could also do with a concluding paragraph.

Hows that
smiley - smiley


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