h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Fellow Poets

Please put your poems into this thread, it will make the whole thing easier to manage.

If you want an example, take a look at Lodestone's pioneering entry, submitted separately.


Hullabaloo, Poet and Tragedian

Africa Blindness.


I see you but do not see you,
I hear you but do not hear you,
I feel you but do not feel you,
I'm near you but am not near you.

I know you but do not know you,
I need you but do not need you,
I want you but do not want you,
I feed you but do not feed you.

I help you but cannot help you,
I name you but cannot name you,
I ignore you but can't ignore you,
I shame you but do not shame you.

You beg me but do not beg me,
You ask me but do not ask me,
You shame me but do not shame me,
You task me but do not task me.

I'm happy but am not happy,
Alive but not alive,
Peaceful but not peaceful,
I thrive but I do not thrive.

Together but not together,
The past is not the past,
The future is not the future,
And the last shall not be the last.

Hi Myriad

sorry I'm late, I've been caught up in RL for a bit.

Well, Great! Super! I like your poem very much indeed. It shows such accomplishment, such control of form and language that you must have done lots of poems already.

I like the uniform tone of voice, the regular rhythms, the depth of thought shown by the well-balanced contradictions in each line. Here art defeats logic hands down - in logic contradictions are meaningless but when handled well in art they can speak volumes. They also make the reader think, which drew this reader into the poem from the start.

I liked the variation in rhythm at the end too. This prevented the form from being overwhelming.

If you've got any conscience you'll submit this to The Post immediately, so everyone can enjoy it - H2G2 Poem, definitely not Vogon Poetry!




Hullabaloo

Thank you for the kindness!!!!

I am a poet (as you have already guessed) and have a book already published. I have submitted this poem under the title Africa Blindness but I am still waiting for a response.

Thanks again,

Myriad.

Hi Myriad,

Thanks for your thanks

Good luck with your submission ...I hope the Post team have the good sense to include your poem very soon The world needs you!

Regards,

Hull