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Peer Review: A6135176 - MAX (Metropolitan Area Express)

Post 1

macuser416

Entry: MAX (Metropolitan Area Express) - A6135176
Author: macuser416 - U1241322

Just something I wrote after school one day because I was bored. Someone recommmended to me that I should think about submitting it to Peer Review, so I am.

Comments/criticism is much appreciated.


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Post 2

McKay The Disorganised

~Very clear. smiley - ok

Obviously being a Brit I know nothing about it, but do any of the stations have a history ? Used as film sets or drama backdrops ?

Just trying to give it a bit of character.

smiley - cider


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Post 3

U168592

Top stuff smiley - ok


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Post 4

AlexAshman


Looks good so far smiley - ok

Major point: it would be nice to have more details, and to separate the entry into the history, the structure of the system (you've mentioned the tunnel, but does the rest run on streets, on separate land etc?), how it works and so on.

Minor points:

smiley - friedegg The title isn't too clear as to what the entry is about - how about 'MAX (Metropolitan Area Express), Portland, USA'

smiley - friedegg Construction on the original MAX line --> Construction of

smiley - friedegg I think it's worth pointing out that the Red line essentially follows the course of the Blue line except for the section towards the airport. You should also point out that the centre is served by loops of all three lines.

smiley - friedegg Interchanges: you should mention that you can change to the Portland Streetcar at Gallery/SW 10th and Library/SW 9th.

smiley - friedegg How to Ride: I'm not sure it's a good idea to quote prices, as they're not really that useful. However, linking to the MAX fares page (http://trimet.org/fares/index.htm) would be ok, and definitely keep the mention of the fareless square.

Hope you find this helpful
Alex smiley - smiley


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Post 5

AlexAshman


416 - are you still about? This looks really promising and h2g2 could do with an entry on the MAX system smiley - smiley


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Post 6

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

One hit wonder? macuser416 hasn't posted since 29 May.

Nominate move to Flea Market.

Galaxy Babe
Scout


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Post 7

U168592

Seconded smiley - ok


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Post 8

U168592

Added to databases smiley - cheers


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Post 9

AlexAshman


Is this officially on it's way to the Flea Market? If you don't mind, I'd like to pounce on this now and get working on it.


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Post 10

U168592

No longer Scouting and Flea Marketing I can't say for sure, but on last looking the Scout database hadn't quite reaching 20. When it does the Italics remove listed Entries from PR and then a Scout can add them to the Flea Market. So it might be a while until it does 'cross over'.

The answer to your question is most likely -

Yeah, go for it, credit the original author, you know the drill smiley - winkeye


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Post 11

AlexAshman


Already done smiley - ok


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Post 12

U168592

I'd leave a massage at the Scouts Forum to that effect, or even remove it from the Flea Market database yourself smiley - winkeye


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Post 13

AlexAshman


I can't edit the table, I can only add records smiley - sadface

I'll send an emu.


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Post 14

U168592

I'd go for a cassowary myself. More colourful.


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Post 15

AlexAshman


Done - A14324104 / F48874?thread=3470032


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