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Entry: The German Christmas Market, Birmingham UK - A61238315
Author: Elentari - U202814

A little short, I know. I feel like it's lacking a little something.

It's missing the essence/character of the market, and that makes it quite dry. You've tried to impress upon the reader that this is a sizeable market, but aren't they all?

A good, solid piece, but it needs a stretch.

Well, I don't really remember the market for having any character, really. It was as generic as all those other German markets you get popping up all over the country.

The only thing I can think of adding is more about the goods that they sell; you've covered food well, but what about the places that sell those cute slippers and mittens, or the germal incense men who appear to be smoking, and things like that?

Good idea for an Entry though.

I agree with Vip this is a good entry I did not know there was a market there and I an about an hour away, as mentioned more detail will help How about expanding the list below.

Bratwurst
A sausage of veal, pork or beef. The name is German, derived from Old High German brätwurst, from brät-, chopped meat and -wurst, sausage. ....................................sort of thing

Chocolates
What types
Garlic bread
How dose it differ from the French
Chocolate-covered fruit (such as bananas) on sticks for convenient eating
More detail please expand....
Noodles
German noodles are special because....
Crepes with a range of fillings
More detail about the fillings....
Fried potatoes (also available as a meal with pork steak and fried mushrooms
Sounds like a regional dish could this be expanded....
Gluhwein
What is this please....
German beer
There many and various types you could mention....
Hot chocolate – with or without alcohol.
Sounds brilliant please tell us more....

This is just an idea, to add some detail.
A very good piece

hmm, me thinks it's not really Brummie-centric enough, you could replace the word Birmingham with the word Nottingham, or Leeds, or Sheffield, or Chipping Norton, and get the same entry about Anglicised German Markets that always pop up around Xmas time and run by either market holders from Norfolk or Polish mitten sellers...

What marks the Birmingham one aside from all these other generic Bratwurst-fests???

And I'm not back, just passing through

Or in the opposite vein, perhaps a piece about generic German markets, and which UK towns and cities hold them?

Thanks everyone. I've added a few bits here and there. I'll take another look soon.

Nice Entry Elentari

Couple of minor things -

Under the header 'What's on offer' you have "Christmas decorations and many others." that doesn't quite make sense, not to me anyway.

In the same section "A host of food can be found, both snacks and meals" might be an idea to put 'including' at the end of that sentence.

I don't know how much you've changed the Entry since the above posts, but I'd say the food/drink info is about right.

Good Luck

Emmily

Thanks, Emmily. Good suggestions, I'll change them.

What, no roasted sweet chestnuts, no musical entertainment?

In the article you link to, it says there were over 180 stalls, and you say there were 94.

Your last sentence:

Funnily enough, there is no equivalent Birmingham market in Frankfurt – maybe the natives of the city just don’t appreciate a good curry.


gives the impression that Birmingham offered to have a market in Frankfurt and Frankfurt refused. Is that the case? If not, you may want to take it out, as it would be insulting.

There were roasted chestnuts actually, I forgot that. No music though.

I don't trust that article. I don't think there were 180 stalls and I've seen the 94 number quoted elsewhere. I'll do more digging.

I'm not aware whether a Birmingham market was suggested for Frankfurt and I'm sure you know I didn't mean anything insulting. I just wanted a bit of a light-hearted ending. What do other people think?

I've reworded the last bit - is that better or worse?

It appears that the reason for the discrepancy in numbers of stalls is that part of the market is actually seperate: there's the German bit and there's the 'Christmas Craft Fair' which is the bit all the locals are in. 180 is the total number of stalls, 94 is the German bit.

I've reworked a few sections and changed the title to reflect that.

I know you didn't mean to insult anybody.

Moving to PR. If any of you have any more comments, could you do it over there please?

PR thread: F48874?thread=7196947