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sprout Started conversation Aug 23, 2011
Entry: Need stronger nets - A86912373
Author: sprout - U192568
Little poem, in reaction to recent events, expressing how I feel about how we deal with rioters, but don't deal with bankers.
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Elektragheorgheni -Please read 'The Post' Posted Aug 23, 2011
Good one, Sprout. All too true not just in UK either.
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Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor Posted Aug 23, 2011
Well said, that h2g2er.
I'm confused by the line:
>>Hedge their baits in Mayfair<<
Did you just mean a play on words, hedging bets + bait?
(This may be because I don't know the significance of Mayfair here.)
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aka Bel - A87832164 Posted Aug 23, 2011
I looked it up:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mayfair
It says there:
>>The district is now mainly commercial, with many offices in converted houses and new buildings, including major corporate headquarters, a concentration of hedge funds, real estate businesses and many different embassy offices, namely the U.S.'s large office taking up all the west side of Grosvenor Square.<<
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minorvogonpoet Posted Aug 23, 2011
This is a good poem, expressing an anger that I suspect a lot of people feel.
I agree that the line 'Hedging their baits in Mayfair' is ambiguous. I'm not sure if you're making complex puns on hedge funds and baits, or if you just meant 'hedging their bets'?
I also wasnt sure about "Holes in the legal mesh/Too big to land perhaps?" To me, it sounds as if the holes in the legal mesh would let the small fry through, rather than the big fish? Perhaps you need something like 'The legal mesh is feeble' to convey your meaning.
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sprout Posted Aug 24, 2011
Thanks all for your comments.
The hedge your baits was a deliberate play on words - what Mayfair is now infamous for is the home of the hedge funds. But maybe it's a bit tricksy.
And yes MVP you're right - I mean weak nets and the idea of holes is not very precise.
It's nice to be back to writing poetry again.
sprout
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