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A57599365 - McGuire's Story

Post 1

acartfart

Entry: McGuire's Story - A57599365
Author: acartfart - U14126110

Why?


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Post 2

Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor

I don't know about the why? business, but this story is a good one.

It didn't go where I thought it would go, which was a nice surprise.

It has a real feel to it. That man's story nearly broke my heart.

One note: Somewhere in there you wrote 'teh' instead of 'the'.


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Post 3

LL Waz

Why indeed.

Moving story.


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Post 4

acartfart

Thank you for your comments.
I am really glad that you felt it, and got it.
Regards the 'why' business; when we come to submit a piece the masters of the masters of the site demand, that we put in comments with no reasoning as to why except that these comments will be used to kick off any conversation. Demand is not exactly the correct word, coercion might be nearer, as in fact the masters of the site will not allow submission without the author placing something in the Comment section.
Several things here: 1) I don't like to be told what to do without sufficient explanation, so I ask 'why'; 2) I do not like to salt any mine for any reader, the reader should come to the piece with no pre-conceptions; 3) I don't want to write anything that might be regarded as being pretentious, and talking about my own work would be so, to me.
But really, number 1 is the important one.
Thanks again for your kind words. I do realise now that most folk would probably see the word 'why' as pertaining to the story, when it is in fact aimed at more-or-less anonymous masters. I must write something else next time.
Nice talking.


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Post 5

acartfart

llWaz.

Thanks for your kind words. Much appreciated.
In regard to the 'why' I have posted a reply to another person, that I am sure you will be able to read.
Thanks again for your words, I really appreciate that you got it, intellectually and emotionally.
Thanks again. Nice talking.
ATB


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Post 6

lil ~ Auntie Giggles with added login ~ returned


Oh, the twists and turns of this story.

It's heartbreaking smiley - cry

lil xx


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Post 7

aka Bel - A87832164

What the others said. Very sad.


I didn't know you can't submit without saying anything. I must try that next time I write something. smiley - biggrin


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Post 8

acartfart

Thanks for the thoughts on McGuire's Story. I am glad that you got something from it.
Don't let it break your heart, although to say something like that it is to reveal sympathy, a trait that I have noted in certain people when I go out amongst them.


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Post 9

lil ~ Auntie Giggles with added login ~ returned


smiley - hug


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Post 10

minorvogonpoet

Thanks for this.

It is a very sad story, and we feel for the old headman.smiley - sadface

Although I'm glad that the twists the story takes aren't predictable, I wasn't sure about the bomb right at the end, as this seems a random act, unconnected with the dance.

Check your spelling and punctuation, as there are several mistakes.


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Post 11

Magwitch - My name is Mags and I am funky.

Liking this one. smiley - smiley

Very sad, but rather good.


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Post 12

UnderGuide Editors

Far longer ago than anyone cares to remember, UG Miners decided that this Entry was worthy of inclusion in the UnderGuide. Congratulations! smiley - bubbly

The UnderGuide - it's quicker by train.


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Post 13

Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor

I think some of those miners were digging to China. smiley - whistle

How's the weather in Beijing?

smiley - bubbly


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Post 14

aka Bel - A87832164

Yes, best rely on smiley - thepost if you want to go somewhere. smiley - winkeye


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