A Conversation for Tennis Classics - The Men’s Singles Final: Wimbledon 2001

A594722: Magic Moments; The Men’s Singles Final: Wimbledon 2001

Post 1

Witty Ditty

Just a small overview of the Men's final, with a bit on the players and key moments of the match.

http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A594722

I'd love some comments, but since I'm at home, and not at college, I can't make too many changes - don't post me down please!

That's not to say that I don't want comments; which will all be gratefully received!

Stay smiley - cool,
WD (still in shock that Goran won....nearly a week after the event...)


A594722: Magic Moments; The Men’s Singles Final: Wimbledon 2001

Post 2

Azara

This is a wonderfully dramatic presentation of the whole event (I didn't watch it, and now I'm really sorry!)

There are a few typos and small errors - I'll get back to you tomorrow about them, if you really want to knwo.

Otherwise, I think you should check the footnotes - as far as I know, they should be full sentences, each starting with a capital letter.
It's great stuff, though!
smiley - cheers
Azara
smiley - rose


A594722: Magic Moments; The Men’s Singles Final: Wimbledon 2001

Post 3

Witty Ditty

Thanks! I'd love to know what needs doing to the entry; it's just that it may take some
time before I get to it....

I'll have the footnotes done as soon as I can!

Any other comments will be gratefully received!

Stay smiley - cool,
WD


A594722: Magic Moments; The Men’s Singles Final: Wimbledon 2001

Post 4

Witty Ditty

Right! Here are the changes thus far....

>sorted the footnotes...and added a few more besides
>added statistics for the match
>added some bits of trivia about the players, and the match

I'd love some more comments please! Again; sorry if I can't address them as quickly as I used to....smiley - borg

Stay smiley - cool,
WD (wanting more smiley - strawberries as they are too yummy)


A594722: Magic Moments; The Men’s Singles Final: Wimbledon 2001

Post 5

Azara

Hi, Witty Ditty!

The main thing that struck me reading this again is that in the match highlights you switch back and forward between the present and past tense - I'd be inclined to stick with one or the other. The present tense does make it all sound very immediate.

A few points about usage and so on -
In the 'Mad, Bad' section:
I wouldn't say 'was a finalist of three times previous' - maybe you could say 'was a finalist three times previously' or 'took part in three previous finals'.
In the 'Aussie' section, saying 'post Pat's 97 win' sounds odd (and a bit of a tonguetwister). What about just 'after'? And you say 'he is regarded as being the best serve-volley in the game' - I'd either say 'having' or change it to 'serve-volleyer'.
And you've got a 'whom' and 'whomever' that actually should be just 'who' (Rafter thanking fans on Centre Court, Not an Impossible result) and 'whoever' (Sets one, two).
In describing Rafter (Not an Impossible result), I think you could take out the 'in this researcher's opinion' - anyone who has read this far will agree that it would be sad to see him go, so you don't have to qualify it.

Well, that was purely on the writing side of things - as I said, I didn't watch the match myself. You should ask Archangel Galaxy Babe - I think I saw somewhere that she's a real Wimbledon fan and she might be able to comment on the content.
It's a very gripping article, and looking good so far.
Good luck!
Azara
smiley - rose


A594722: Magic Moments; The Men’s Singles Final: Wimbledon 2001

Post 6

Witty Ditty

Right! Thanks for the comments; I've tried to act on the changes:

>tenses in the 'match' section altered to the present
>Bit on Goran has been altered
>bit on Pat has been altered
>whom/who has been altered

Any other comments will be gratefully received!

Stay smiley - cool,
WD


A594722: Tennis Classics - The Men’s Singles Final: Wimbledon 2001

Post 7

Witty Ditty

Right! A few more changes;
>moved the table
>Changed the title

Any other comments will be gratefully received!

Stay smiley - cool,
WD


A594722: Tennis Classics - The Men’s Singles Final: Wimbledon 2001

Post 8

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Brilliant, WD.
Thank you very much.
I thoroughly enjoyed reliving that match!
smiley - biggrin

~AGB~

p.s. I'm also going to post this Peer Review thread at your entry.smiley - bigeyes


A594722: Tennis Classics - The Men’s Singles Final: Wimbledon 2001

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Monsignore Pizzafunghi Bosselese

Makes me wonder that none of the scouts has found their way to this great entry yet. Blame it on the holiday season smiley - smiley

Another smiley - borgsmiley - tomato smash hit entry, so it seems to me. I can't comment on the facts, but it's a great piece of reading smiley - biggrin


Bossel


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Post 11

Azara

Congratulations, Witty Ditty!
Have some smiley - bubbly! Or some smiley - strawberries, even though it's not Wimbledon weather!
Azara
smiley - rose


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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

smiley - bubblyWitty Ditty!
Well done!


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Monsignore Pizzafunghi Bosselese

Now see what happened! (my logo smiley - smiley )

Bossel


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