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Entry: Creole – more than a language phenomenon - A51968794
Author: Tanja_K - U13865767

Please help me to improve my essay about Creole... thanks, Tanja

An interesting subject and it's probably a good idea to focus on one specific place (La reunion).

But (sorry but you did ask for comments):

o I think it might by an idea to expand the first line of text ('illustrated by the example..... perhaps by adding here or to the second paragraph.
It's French creole you're talking about and it's spoken in many places. Is it the same or similar Creole in those places? Has harmony/standardisation increased since the upsurge of Creole awareness?
o Once you've set the general scene, the focus on La Reunion seems more natural.

o Taking the opposite track completely, you could perhaps change the title to specifty it's Reunion creole.


Feel free to disregard

Hi there Tanja_K

I need more time to read this properly, but I like the idea of using a specific example to illustrate a more general case; however to do this successfully, you need to demonstrate or at least to state, that the example can be extended to the wider scope. In other words, does the example of La Réunion apply to other creole islands?

Oh, my brother lives in La Réunion

I'll take a look a the Entry when I have more time

Note that there is another text in peer review :

A52091651 - Pidgins & Creoles

If both entries are accepted, it would be a good idea to link them.

Hi - this is a lovely entry - thanks

You have conveyed a great deal of historical and cultural information and I feel that I would also like to know some more specifics about the language itself. You give some hints - it's suited to swearing and threatening, sexuality metaphors and comic paraphrases - but it would be good to get some sense of why this is. Is it, for example, because the language is simplified and so words typically have several meanings and by leaving the context ambiguous you can play on this? Whatever the reasons, a couple of examples would suffice.

Tanja, are you still around to work on this? Even if you don't want to make the suggested changes, it would be nice of you to acknowledge them and say why you'd prefer to keep things the way they are

Oh sorry I am still working on this, I was just too busy to review it, but I'll do it in the next view days. Thanks a lot for the criticism, I will take it into consideration...
Tanja

Okay, I added some lines to paragraph 2 and 3, according to your propositions. I hope these improvements make the article flow more naturally. Please give me some more comments on it, so that I can make changes.

Thanks,
Tanja

I added some more changes

I'll time to sit down this evening to give this a thorough read

I see that you've added some helpful information.

I need a little more background or something in order to understand this intriguing bit:
"...and why they are shouting at a small male figure in red with expressions we would have never thought about"

I'm going to suggest a something to add examples of the language in a way that will spice up the section headings - namely, give the section heading in both english and creole. Think of how you would say the particular heading in creole, then give the english translation. For example (this is bound to be way off, but it's just for an example for the first section. Here goes. Instead of "A question of definition" - try:
Creole - Kisa sa a ye? (What is Creole?)

Again, I apologize for probably getting that wrong - but really, I'd just like to encourage you to include more examples of the language.

Excellent suggestion paily

FM or back to entry? Author hasn't posted since July 8

Enough material here for FM, I think

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