h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Nervousness - A47915003
Author: Psycorp Six-Oh-Three (This bit goes in the brackets) - U219983

Stretcher Entry #4

Funny symbols (curly apostrophes and dashes) are appearing as, well, funny symbols in my browser, making this hard to read.

dash: — or –

apostrophe: &rsquot; or a simple straight apostrophe, which need not be encoded.

'inverted commas': &lsquot; &rsquot; &lquot; &rquot;

TRiG.

Yes, this feels real - a good portrayal of interview nerves.

I think the third sentence in the second paragraph should read:
'He knew he'd be able to come here and do what he set out to do.'

Yup, that's all vividly familiar!

Spotty-nosed or snotty-nosed?

I liked spotty-nosed to be honest.

After a conversation with a friend, I need to change the ending.

Actually, I can't, would be cheating. But for posterity, here's his comment:

"damn, i was waiting for a twist and had convinced myself midway through the second para that the last sentence would read "and she handed him the cup and asked him to enter the room to make his sperm deposit" "

Why not change it? Nothing is written in stone.

Good. Real, vivid and concise.

I don't suppose there is a correct spelling of kidder, but kiddo would be more familiar round here.

An ending with a punch would add to it, and I don't think changes made before Thurday midnight are cheating. But imo the sperm deposit twist, though funny, seems more obvious than the class of the entry deserves.

I like the idea of a twist, but I do like the open ending it's currently got. If I can think of a different ending by tomorrow I might work it in.

Ms GB