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Entry: Hawksbill Turtles - A43652586
Author: Jhawkesby - U13402970

This is my guide entry on Hawksbill Turtles. They are wonderful animals and they mostly live in tropical climates. If there are any things that need to be added I don't mind adding them.

This is just lovely, Jhawkesby, well done
I have nothing to add right now

GB

Thankyou very much.

Yes, nice Entry, jh

Only one comment:
'You may have noticed some of these creatures are filled with lethal toxins so you would think they would kill the turtles...'

How would we 'notice' this? Suggest that you re-phrase this slightly.

A

Sorted it out.
When I used may in the sentence it was suppose to mean that if someone who knows the animals would have noticed that they were filled with toxins but I can see what you mean.

Yes, that's better

like this -good one Hawkesby

Noth€r.

In my opinion this is a lovely little Entry but theres a few little things that perhaps could be changed.

I think you could put the word 'also' in one of the sentences so it reads something like 'They are also found in America, but this is rare'.

I think 'weighing' could be changed to 'weigh'

The use of 'you' ....not sure whether it's possible to get away with writing Entries in this way.

On the whole though this is a great little read well done.

Thankyou.
I have sorted it out but with the you bit I did think about it when I was writing the guide entry and I needed that shock effect and when I read a few edited guide entries I saw they used you for this effect but if anybody can think of an alternative that would be great.

well you could change it to

Some of these creatures are filled with lethal toxins, but Hawksbills are immune to the toxins; this can give them the advantage of more food.

or alternatively leave it as it is

I'll leave it to you and the sub-editor

OK no problem.
What I will do is leave it as it is and I will see what other people think and if they agree then I will change it.

It has been a whole week.
Does anything need to be added or changed.

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good one J Hawkesby

Keep writing

Well done!