h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Hi,

Steady now, Chips, as the Churchill Car-dog says, it's not that urgent. You'll get round to it when your ready, like we all do!

I never could cope!

Sorry for MY delay in replying.

Ron

You're right Ron...in my own sweet time

After the Easter holiday, I feel I will be up to reading your piece. I need to conserve my strength

Chips

Hi Ronbloggs !

Hope you had a good Easter break.

I have now read your 'Living with a...' and I thought it was excellent.

(Mind, I am a nobody here)

I liked your phrase 'on the turn' I once had a doctor write about one of my little foibles 'if left to its own devices would have turned particularily nasty' Such a comfort.

Thanks again !!

Chips

Hi Chips,
I'm still on my break here in Balsham, and using my son's Dell laptop. I'll have to have one of these beauties. I shall be home tomorrow to my machine, and will have a word with you soon on other things sent to my personal space for consideration. Thank you for your review of my main piece; hope you didn't find it too depressing.

Ron

Hell Ronbloggs !

No, didn't find it depressing.

If I'm honest, rather you that me

If I'm ever in that situation, I'll read your piece again

Safe journey home

Chips

HellO Ronbloggs !

No, didn't find it depressing.

If I'm honest, rather you that me

If I'm ever in that situation, I'll read your piece again

Safe journey home

Chips

O!... 'Hell' would have done Chips; I knew what you meant!

You're not likely to need a gastrectomy, so you shouldn't worry on that account. You might be reassured by my comments to one of my other reviewers. That would give you an idea why I needed one.

Ron

"cured in a few weeks by simply taking antibiotics to clear you of helicobacter pylori and also a healing tablet, 1 per day, for about 1..."

Evening, Ron. That's what you meant isn't it ?

This is really strange, but I have to see my GP to arrange one of these tests. Nowadays they can be done either by breath testing or blood testing - or so I understand.

Anyway, if I've got the wrong end of the stick please ignore me.

Thanks for getting back


Chips

Hi Chips,
More or less what I had in mind,yes.
Sorry to hear you are having a problem, but I am sure your GP will have you back on top line in no time at all, so don't worry! It's easy to say that, of course, but most gastric problems are relatively minor these days, and with modern medicines can soon be put right. Don't forget that my problems stem from more than 50 years ago, when I developed an ulcer at age 11. The medical and surgical techniques were nothing like as sophisticated then as they are today.

Ron

Good God !

An ulcer at 11....

No, Ron, I'm not worrying. What's the point....

I read your PS and I took the liberty of adding you to my friends list Is that all right !!!

Lovely day here, and I'm off out into the blue in a little while......

Chips

Hello again Chips,
You're most welcome to include me as a friend; I'm most flattered that you have asked me. May I reciprocate the request and include you as my first on-line friend ever!! Not many in h2g2 have chosen my friendship; I may be paranoid, but I suspect it's something to do with ageism! Or it could be my on-line manner? I just don't know. What I can say in my own defence,however, is that I am a moral person who is a strong family orientated kind of bloke!
If you're 'out in the blue' you won't read this for a while; but I'm intrigued! Are you a pilot? Or a sailing man?
Or like me,just one for the great outdoors!

You may not be a drinking person, but, if you are have one on me!!

Ron

Ah ha ! So this is where you have made the assumption I'm Jack Tar

I'm a strong family orientated woman

Ron, how could you think I was a fella

Luckily I am fond of the great outdoors and I like a . Only in moderation you understand.......

See you Ron,

Chips

Thank you, Ron. It's nice to be appreciated. It does look like a professional article to me. And you're right pointing out its importance. Doctors do not have these kind of 'inside' knowledge.

From one writer to the other, small amounts like 2, 3 or 15 can be written out in letters, two, three etc.

Something else: you shift between 'the writer' 'you' and 'the patient'
I advice to replace the word 'you' and 'ýour'. You can circumvent it replacing 'you'by 'the'.

For example: '...keep a drink at the elbow'
'...restrict the already small capacity for digestion'.

Replace some 'you's' just by patient, or just circumvent the patient by saying something like 'what would be a light meal for most people might be a ...'

'By trial and error the patient finds a balance'

It's a good entry.

Thank you indeed, Krabatt,

Right, you make a good point about the 'you's!
Isn't it surprising how we miss this sort of thing in 'reviewing' our own articles, even though we know the 'boredom' of repetitive words is a 'put off' for our readers!

The number writing is also a good point, and I shall look at the piece again to see where these might be better applied.

Do you think it looks better now, separated into paragraphs?

Your good to have around!

It's always nice when advice and suggestions for improvement are appreciated. Without doubt, your entry looks good.

Can you remove the first header please? It's not needed as the title forms the first header.

Hi Cyzaki,

Thank you for your interest in my piece.

For the life of me, I cannot see a second title on either of the versions I have in my Personal Space postings history!
I am wondering where, and which version you have been looking at recently.
Can you enlighten me further, please?
If you can point me in the right direction I would be glad to comply with your request and remove the offending duplication.

f.

The first header that says 'One Researcher's Experience' or something similar.

Hi Ron

The problem is that the title is considered as the first header, and it is EG standard that an Entry does not start with a header.

Alternatively, you could add a couple of sentencese, as an introdution to your Entry, above 'One Researcher's Experience:' heading, that would be ok.

Emmily