h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

This is such a lovely entry. And just to make it even better I've come along to nit-pick, which I hope is valid and constructive

Under heading "Fairies in Art & Literature" first paragraph, would this sound better as all one sentence, with a comma after poets: "...and poets, who have portrayed..."?

Under heading "Fairies on Stage", first paragraph, the comma after from should come out.

Under heading "Fairy Legends", second paragraph: would it read better as one sentence with a comma after hell: "...nor bad enough to go to hell, leaving them..."?

Same heading, third paragraph, second sentence: the placing of commas around "who had not yet been bathed" implies that *all* the children had not been bathed as opposed to just some of them. Would it read better as "...she hid the children who had not yet been bathed, in a futile..."?

Under heading "Where the experts may have failed", would it read better repunctuated as follows?

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Is this kind of comment helpful? It feels like I'm being picky, but I understand the point of Peer Review is to "polish" as well as to correct inconsistencies, etc. Please let me know if I'm wrong so I can stop offending people!

Deb

Yes, it's very helpful, Deb.

But, if you could please post any further comments the Peer Review thread F48874?thread=600110&skip=0&show=20 That way all the comments are in one thread, which makes it easier all round.

Emmily

Thanks for that feedback Emmily - I'm too eager and didn't really understand the whole process, so I just hit the "discuss this entry" button.

I'll click on Peer Review in future.

Deb