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Entry: The Great Divorce, by C.S. Lewis - A33310450
Author: Bookmouse - U2218784

Hello, I'm not sure whether this is finished or not and need some second opinions, please! I think it might be too quotation-laden and bitty. What do you think?

Thanks,

Bookmouse

I like this bookmouse but it as you say needs some work. You might for instance incorporate some of the quotes into the text.

Dont do anything now as it is late I and I have to re read the peice, I will be back.

Well done by the way good entry

Thanks, I will await further comments!

Sorry, I think I will go and amend the post even though I've heard nothing else from you...

Can anyone suggest anything else I could do to improve this? I'm stuck and it's about a year since I started working this entry! Please help.

Right, I am just going to send this to Peer Review. I don't know what else to do with it and it's been hanging around for too long!

Oh, I can't.

It has to be removed from one forum before you can submit it to another.
There is a list of entries in Writers workshop
One of them is my article on Little Richard
Another is your work. the List should have dates involved and atfar right the word remove. Click on this and you will be out of the workshop.
The article looks ready for Peer review to me. good Luck.

Thanks. I think I worked out how to do it in the end but chickened out!

I know those Peers can be frightening some times , they even seem brutal, but they are just people like you and I. I think this work deserves a shot at Edited Guide status