h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: halo an introduction to the universe - A3283193
Author: himura musashi <memento mori> A.K.A Mungojerrie.A.K.A Anf - U789423

any thing to add please tell me im still writing it

Please put and tags around your paragraphs.

what does that do?

ah i see it makes it into paragraphs sorry i never used guide ml before any thing else?

Look out for the difference between there and their; and between were and where. Don't join sentences together with a comma. Don't use an apostrophe when making something plural (that is, when you have more than one of something).

hmmm this proving more wierd then i thought lol theres no way you can make these changes for me gnomy?

All I'm asking you to do is to practise writing in proper English. Be careful with what you write. Read through it a few times to see that it says what you think it says. I could point out every single spelling mistake to you, but you're better off learning how to spot them for yourself.

i wasnt having a go or anything stupid i was trying to joke, unfortunately im as funny as a trainwreck thanks for helping me out gnomy if you could point out every mistake it would be appreciated cos i cant write for toffee

It's very simple: 'Please may I have some toffee?'

hmmmmmm you win this time anything else you notice wrong with it apart from the half finished ness and massive grammatical mess ups?

You need a good introduction. Assume that the reader has never heard of halo and doesn't know whether it is a game or a type of deodorant.

Feel free to quote from or change the following:

"Halo is the latest computer game from Microsoft. Designed to run on the X-Box console, it offers the very best in computer graphics and an exciting action-packed adventure for those of us who are proud of the size of our weapon and have a to prove it."

You probably need to change the title slightly to reflect this:

Halo the X-Box Game: an introduction to the universe

or something like that.

thanks, see without my stupid remarks we get along much better