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Entry: The Beginning of the American Civil War - A2972676
Author: Jodan - Ohio history for 4200, Alex. - U201497

Hi hi Peers.
I think I'll probably encounter a bit of controversy in claiming slavery was the root of the war - but let me say this. I've spent months researching, debating and thinking, so unless you're ready to debate, don't bring this up.

Anyway. This is the tip of the iceburg. Several other entries on the US Civil War are being put into PR at the same time - and three on Abe Lincoln were already entered some time ago. They're linked at the top of this entry.





PS - I plan to proofread these all this weekend. Here's hoping!

Yep. Some proofreading would be good, there are some passages where you still have some trails of editing (double words etc.) But that is of course of minor importance.

I think this Entry is brilliant. I enjoyed reading it and learned a lot!

HELL

This is a real tour de force and a terrific achievement, Jodan. From an initial perusal of the article I did notice a few typos and repeated sentences but it is probably too early to comment on them at this stage. My only small gripe would be the bit on the horses of the civil war at the end. Maybe its a bit too much in the context of describing the start of the civil war.

Great job!

Woodpigeon

Why, thank you.

Woodpigeon, this was originally, as I mentioned, part of a much larger entry, which included the Events of the War and the End. The technology bit - which includes the horses - was meant to define a few things and put one in the mindset of the beginning of the war. I think it's still useful, though of course I could insult the intelligence of the read and remind them that there weren't tanks and stealth bombers in the US Civil War .

Added a few things and proofread the thing

Nice entry Jodan

I don't want to be too picky () but shouldn't most of the mentions of the 'south' be the 'South', as a proper name? this aspect just stood out when I was reading your excellent Lincoln entries.

Pimmsaloonie
...what does Jodan want most? I asked myself, bound to be checking masses of text to decide whether to correct a word for one very little removed in meaning...

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Pimms

This is a fantastic addition to the guide Pimms!

HELL

I didn't write it - Jodan did. I've never even been to Ohio