h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: This Is England - Film - A22925162
Author: mummit - U7928195

Hello,

If anybody has seen this film...let me know what you think!!

Thanks
Helen

I haven't seen the film, but your entry gives me a rather good idea of what it was about. I'm sorry to see that you submitted this months ago with no feedback at all. Let's rectify that!

My first question would be when was the film made? I know you say it takes place in the 1980s, but when was it actually filmed?

My other concerns are that there are a few places where this sounds more like a review than a synopsis of the film. There isn't anything at all wrong with a review, but a review would be better suited to the Post than to the Edited Guide. Specifically the paragraph before the Shane Meadows header seems to be based somewhat in opinion as opposed to fact or analysis. Certainly this is just my opinion, others may see that as being okay.

There are a few technical flubs scattered about; punctuation errors or spacing errors, etc.

I agree - I think the most important tidying that needs doing is separating the plot summary from the analysis and the analysis from the opinion. It jumps a bit.

I think the paragraph before Shane Meadows is ok - it's mostly analysis - except the last sentence
>>Yet the ending did feel rather sudden; it did feel as if more story development needed to take place, more needed to happen with the characters to make it a truly satisfactory film.

Which is opinion. It could be turned into analysis with a bit of trouble.

Hello,

Thanks for the opinions, will pop on my thinking cap and have another look at this...

Hello once more. Have just been tweaking and deleting - your thoughts would be appreciated!

I didn't see the earlier version, but it looks good now. It certainly encouraged me to see the film. Your punctuation needs a bit of tidying, but I think the overall structure is okay. I think. Wait for a second opinion on that.

TRiG.

Can you separate the plot summary from the other details?

I agree with TRiG, the overall structure is okay

GB

I started to separate out the plot from the background details as Leo suggested, but I didn't think it flowed as well. (have just realised I didn't save that version so can't post it here to show you all - d'oh!! )Also, I thought it made it a more interesting article to read when there was a mixture of plot with a few background details about the directors and actors. Would be interested to know what other people felt about the structure - also of any other bits and pieces you'd like to see added..?

Well, since it's short I suppose it's fine. I just like things neat and tidy. *thinks about floor of own room* Other people's things neat and tidy.

Things I'd want to know about a movie: director, actors, year, awards, reviews (positive or negative?), how widely it played (never heard of this one before)... I think that's it.

Oh, and rating (like PG-13, R, X...)

neat and tidy....hmmm...something which I aspire to be, but mess just keeps on getting in the way!
I will start digging out those bits and pieces and get back to you.

Your Guide Entry has just been picked from Peer Review by one of our Scouts, and is now heading off into the Editorial Process, which ends with publication in the Edited Guide. We've therefore moved this Review Conversation out of Peer Review and to the entry itself.

If you'd like to know what happens now, check out the page on 'What Happens after your Entry has been Recommended?' at EditedGuide-Process. We hope this explains everything.

Thanks for contributing to the Edited Guide!

Too late, apparently. Congrats! And many more.

Thanks - I managed to add a couple of extra bits just before it got picked!

Phew. Well, there's always the post-PR-subbing-last-minute-please-add-this part of editing, if there's anything you wanted particularly. On the other, hand if it's just something I wanted, eh, who cares.