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Entry: Lord Byron - Mad, Bad, and Dangerous to Know - Part 4 - A1293662
Author: Caper Plip - "I got a wife and a cold on the same day, but have got rid of the last pretty speedily." - U180841

Hi there!

This was meant to be part of a University Project, but time got the better of me and I've only finished it now

Part 1 can be found here: A1293590
Part 2 can be found here: A1293608
Part 3 can be found here: A1293617

Any comments?

Caper Plip

this is brilliant, I'm never sure where to comment on these linked entries so I've done it on the last one. I don't really have much to say other than Well DONE!

I'm not an expert on the subject matter but it's easy to read and well written.

I'm still reading through this, (printed it out) but I do have one comment. Entries tend to do better out of context (if someone read one entry without reading the rest) if you used a description of the entry in the title, instead of saying Part One, Part Two, etc.

Something like 'The Early Years' or a title describing what era the entry is about would make me very happy.

Incredible content so far, by the way! Well done. I'll be back once I've read through it all (and get some more printer paper)

Before I say anything else about the entry, I did a word count on the entry when I was in the middle of writing Part 3 and at that point it was at 18 A4 pages long - in Word...

I've never been too keen on long titles, but I'll switch them to something different and have a gander

Thanks for your comments!

Caper Plip

I don't blame you, but I hate entries with 'parts'

I'm not asking you to combine these, as I normally might, because as you said, it's 18 pages long at part 3

I like the titles Nice job, I think

I hope your printer's okay...

Caper Plip

Yes, well done. A very interesting read and obviously lots of research.

So Byron only produced daughters? I wasn't counting during the reading, but I make it three or four, with one dying in childhood.

That's an interesting point In research, those were the ones that I could find, but considering the number of women Byron slept with is currently judged to be somewhere between 200 - 500, he may have had some sons, but girls were the ones I could find...

Caper Plip

I love the titles,

addes another compliement to the pile.

200-500! Gosh! Is there somewhere in the entry you could put that information? I suppose it works out to 10-25 per year.

Yes, it would be interesting to find out how many progeny he produced.

I agree with ZSF, that would be an interesting estimate to include

Okay, some more nitpicks on Part 4-

-"...but the journey had been tiring. Byron was led to his lodgings to wash and rest a little, for the journey had been tiring." It's two seperate sentences, but this just doesn't sound right

-"Unfortunately for Byron, the Greeks failed to acknowledge his work upon unity, and the battle was between Byron and the leaders of the Greek armies, taking a toll upon him as well as the war." Should that be '...Greek Armies, which took a toll upon him as well as the war.'?

Also, and entry you might want to link to - A1037927

Added a section close to the end about the number of people that he slept with - and found the reason for the number of children as well

- removed the repeated 'tiring' part
- added a 'which'

I'd already put the link to the 'Live Fast, Die Young' entry as a reference

Caper Plip

Oop again... my mistake

Good for you, CP.

An interesting reason too. I can't say I knew they were in use in his day. I wonder when the earlest production of them was?

Thanks

According to this entry: A375446, it says that condoms were used in the ancient civilisations, but the earliest archeological evidence was in a toilet in Dudley, in the Midlands, dated to about 1647...

It's a fascinating entry - well worth a read

Caper Plip

on self-exile --> in self-imposed exile
would be read even today --> is read even today
along with a short -- a short what?
entirity --> entirety
Guiccioli -- are you sure this is spelt right?
it was possible to see that Byron was --> it is possible to see that Byron was
This is thanks to a certain Lord Nelson -- really? I'm intrigued. Can you tell us more?

Good Work!

Hi there!

Made those changes... and yes, I did know it was Wellington... not Nelson...

I'll probably get lost in London, taking the Underground to Charing Cross Station instead of Waterloo...



Caper Plip

A375446 - fascinating. I see you've linked to it.

Leather! Makes me wonder of there was any sensation at all. Tortoiseshell? The mind boggles. Oiled silk sounds much more practical. Trust the Chinese!