A Conversation for A Cup of Joe

Peer Review: A1159625 - A Cup of Joe

Post 1

roundbrackets

Entry: A Cup of Joe - A1159625
Author: roundbrackets - U240581

My first submission!


A1159625 - A Cup of Joe

Post 2

The Professor

Here's the first problem I see: "as a references to a cup of coffee comes from (not that I care if you do, I will delve into it anyway because I spent all this time finding out).

First: you have "references" when it shouldn't be plural

Second: The guide frowns upon first person in PR...so that bit should be removed


Congrats on your first entry!!

The Professor
Societas Eruditorum


A1159625 - A Cup of Joe

Post 3

roundbrackets

> First: you have "references" when it shouldn't be plural

Ah, yes, thank you.

> Second: The guide frowns upon first person in PR...so that bit should be removed

Well, yes I know, you should refrain from writing in first person unless you have a good reason, and after thinking about I I decided to rewrite this part.


A1159625 - A Cup of Joe

Post 4

Number Six

I like it - all I can point to in the way of improvements are are a few typos: troups > troops, for example, and I think there's a 'to' missing from "(Andy Warhol liked the paint the cans)"

smiley - cheers

Cheers,
Number Six

smiley - mod


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Post 5

Geggs

Nice entry!smiley - ok

One thing though, you only really need to reference the entry on coffee once. You can take out the links around the other times you use the word. No need for overkill.smiley - winkeye


Geggs


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Post 6

Felonious Monk - h2g2s very own Bogeyman

I like this etymological stuff. Full marks.

FM
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Post 7

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Post 8

There is only one thing worse than being Gosho, and that is not being Gosho

Well done smiley - cheers

smiley - geeksmiley - online2longsmiley - stiffdrinksmiley - hangoversmiley - ok
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Post 9

Felonious Monk - h2g2s very own Bogeyman

Well done: I picked this, and it's nice to see short, well-written, informative entries make the grade.

smiley - cheers or perhaps I should say smiley - cappuccino

FM
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Post 10

Number Six

There's nothing quite like your first guide entry getting accepted... well done!

smiley - mod


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Post 11

roundbrackets

Thank you all for your feedback and help. Wow, I feel unexpectedly happy. =)
It should be a messure of how busy I have been that you knew before I did. Haha. School, work, stuck in coach mesmerized by reality TV...
This along with the coffee brewing the the kitchen will make my Friday.


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