h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

I've come to the end of my story! Hurrah! I'm glad to be free of it,

It's at A87816379.

[Amy P]

I've added a short last scene, just to round the story off.

I've read the whole thing. And my verdict - it starts out quite well but gets worse.

Which is what happens if you don't plan your story and you write it fast.There's at least one serious inconsistency - the appearance of the two actual murderers, when we meet them near the end, doesn't tally with Lizzy Wilde's description earlier.
It's certainly fast moving and there's quite a lot of action but there's too much dialogue and not enough of the other narrative forms - description and internal thought.

Never mind, at least I managed my thirty journal postings!

Splendid mvp! hah!

Dear writerlady, you're just soooo critical of your own work. heheh. I think this story is a wonderful achievement!

I really like the way you wrapped it up, with that final paragraph.

So here's a deep question. How do you feel after writing it? Even though you might be glad you've finished the project, it must be quite a thing to be involved with these characters of your own creation for an entire month. Will you miss them? Have any of the twists and turns surprised you?

Thank you, cc.

Maybe I'll print my story out and put it away with the idea of revisiting it some time.