h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Hi Awix,
Thanks for all you've done for my story so far

I'm just here really to ask (since you are probably fairly familiar with it) what you think of it so far? I don't mean to be a pain, I'd like to get some feedback, which might help me improve future parts (though the next two, 6 & 7, are fairly solid already).

Thanks,
Vecingetorix

Oooh lummie! Erm, thanks for the kind words, I assume it was Shazz wot tipped you off?

Really, editing 168 (as Shazz and I call it) really isn't much more than giving some of the writing a bit of a polish, fixing the odd bit of punctuation and inserting the GMl tags.

I haven't read further ahead than part 4, but what I would say is... and this is rich coming from a guy who hasn't dared put any of his stories inf front of the public eye... what I would say is that the first four parts all have pretty similar structures, which is that Terry finds himself in a weird situation, gets into an argument/strange discussion with someone and then falls through the floor/gets shown somewhere else.

If the story is going to be all about Terry wandering around having a succession of weird arguments then fine, but otherwise it mightn't be a bad idea to start thickening up the plot and introducing a few other characters who stick around from episode to episode. You've probably already started to do this, in which case I humbly apologise for telling you what you already knew!

Without trying to give too much away, part five is the last that really jumps around a bit. I'm afraid this probably follows a similar structure, though I hope you'll find its quite different in its own way. But I agree with you. What I have planned for parts six and seven will use mostly characters from previous parts - particularly part 6 (which goes more in to depth of the goings on with the people of part 4)... but you'll find out soon enough

I always appreciate honesty I'm learning here, this is my first go at doing something for the post so I'm always very appreciative of hearing what people actually think. No appology needed!

I just hope I can keep the viewing public still interested!

Thank you very much for the feed back by the way
You see its not easy to coax readers in to telling you what they like about stories, and to be honest I don't want people to think if they comment on my story they always have to give me an essay of what they think about it. But I'm trying to put the outline of the story in my head, in to words, so any feed back is always welcome.

And yes Shazz tipped me off . I hope you don't mind. I just thought it would be nice to thank the person who is taking the time to put the finishing touches to my work. I'm very happy with what you've done so far

My pride is not often easily bruised, so don't be afraid to be brutally frank with me.

Once again thanks for all your help

Verc