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You wouldn't mind giving me a few pointers do you?
My 'juice' as you say is clear but my tenses and rhyme scheme are flowing to the pit of my stomach with nothing but a thought of what to write!
'Rainbow' is the best I've wrote so far but I think 'Star' is as well but when I grab fate it slips back through my fingers leaving me with my hope and wishes for another 'best write'

You seem to know your way around current problems (writers block, bad form...!)
You also said you've done mainly poetry, I have not seen but will keep an eye out I'm sure!
Thanks for reading this, you seem to have more of a back ground already with the other writers so i thought i'd say Hi!

From Tara

Hello there Tarastar,

I took a wee dander over to your perch and read mostly everything. Posted sincere comments on quite a few. And yes, liked the two you mention above plus the teenage rant one out of all of them.
Are you still at school, doing exams? Can sense the youthfuness in your writing. Keep with this innocence and freshness.
I've left suggestions on each poem post. Hopefully they will be of some, if any, help to you. I was honest. That's what it is all about - to learn, construct, review and tune into a style that suits you. Thanks also for your kind words above too.

Many best wishes and good luck, Tara.

Jen

PS: You can access my stuff by clicking on recent works link. The titles listed on port page are all life-writing with one short story. Feel free to browse and comment.

Thank you and I've left school and done all my exams! I just have kept my imagination from primary school lol
I'll check your stuff out and give comments and thank you for your time to read mine.

Tara,

No problem! Am glad to be of any help, if at all. Guess that's why we are all here!
Keep writing, Kid!

Jen

thx