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Hi there, I've been working on and off on your marvellous Fort Foster entry. Sorry it's taking me this long, but family matters have been chaotic here, so I didn't get around to it the way I intended.

You can see what I've done so far at A87725578

I'll go through it with a fine comb again, but this is more or less what it's going to look like. If you have any queeries or complaints, please tell me so we can find a solution.

Bel

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Looks good, here are a few corrections, almost, if not all, of my own words;

>The Location

>Shortly after the Territory of Florida was under the control of the United States...

Shortly after the Territory of Florida >came< under the control of the United States...

>Relations Breakdown
>... While carrying dispatches between Fort Brooke and Fort King he was shot and killed near the bridge crossing the
Hillsborough River.

... While carrying dispatches between Fort Brooke and Fort King>add comma< he was shot and killed near the bridge crossing
the Hillsborough River.

Naval Command

>During the afternoon of 1 January, 1837, Lieutenant Thomas Leib, of the sloop of war Concord was ordered to detached
service, accompanied by 60 sailors and two midshipmen to take command of Fort Alabama; evidently news of the name
change had not yet reached the Navy.

During the afternoon of 1 January, 1837, Lieutenant Thomas Leib, of the sloop of war Concord was ordered to detached
service, accompanied by 60 sailors and two midshipmen>add comma< to take command of Fort Alabama; evidently news of
the name change had not yet reached the Navy.

> The West India Squadron, to which Lieutenant Leib and his men belonged had many responsibilities beyond the conflict in Florida.

The West India Squadron, to which Lieutenant Leib and his men belonged>Add comma< had many responsibilities beyond the conflict in Florida.

>Even more serious was the French threats to blockade Mexican Ports. Both threatened the trade of US merchant ships

Even more serious was the French threats to blockade Mexican Ports. Both >threatened - let's change the second "threatened" to "endangered" just so it reads better< the trade of US merchant ships

Thanks
FS

Still working on this because I really want to get it right.

I've changed those bits you mentioned above.

A few other things:

You say:

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Only trouble is, that grog is made of rum and water, not whiskey:

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Now I take it that you refer to the troops (pl), and not to the number (sg) when you say 'were'. I think it should be fewer (not less), though, because it is a countable number.

If you'd refer to the number, we could say: the actual number of troops WAS always smaller than 200.

What do you think?

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Is onto correct?

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wiki says that route 301 was established in 1932, not 1934: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/U.S._Route_301#History

Shall we say "was built around 1934"?

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That's enough for today.

Only trouble is, that grog is made of rum and water, not whiskey:

Were I writing about the Royal Navy you would have a good point. The term "grog" was actually used to show scorn for the Admiral who ordered the rum to be diluted with water.

In the US navy rum was commonly replaced with whiskey due to availability and American preferences. I have read several period American accounts that support this, as the liquor was still watered down the informal name of grog remained. The official term in the regulations used the phrase "daily spirit ration." I could easily write an entry on this alone if there was sufficient interest.

How about a footnote;
>While grog is traditionally made with rum, the Americans Navy often substituted whiskey instead.<


Now I take it that you refer to the troops (pl), and not to the number (sg) when you say 'were'. I think it should be fewer (not less), though, because it is a countable number.

If you'd refer to the number, we could say: the actual number of troops WAS always smaller than 200.

What do you think?<
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"fewer" is an improvement.



Is onto correct?
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into is more correct, one is in a fort or ship, not on them Thanks.



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wiki says that route 301 was established in 1932, not 1934: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/U.S._Route_301#History

Shall we say "was built around 1934"?
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US 301 runs almost the full length of the east coast of the United States, like Rome it was not built in a day and probably not in a single year. The Interstate system started in the early 1950's took several decades to complete. I had a source that said the road was built through the area prior to becoming an official part of 301. The park opened in 1938 so the road was certainly built before then. These were both part of FDR's employment programs during the great depression.

as far as "about" or "around" for an approximate date, I am happy with either.


<> in construction, not of?

A fine point, to me in construction implies incomplete, while of construction indicates continuous work without the delays and interruption common to government projects. Under construction might be a better phrase but will require restructuring the sentence. I will leave it to your judgement.

Thank you for your fine work and dedication.


FS

I didn't follow your link on 301 before replying.

Wikki says;

"In the late 1940s, US 301 was extended again, south all the way to Tampa, Florida. In South Carolina it ran along U.S. Route 15 southwest to Santee, South Carolina and replaced S.C. Highway 4 west to Orangeburg, South Carolina. From Orangeburg, US 301 ran southwest with U.S. Route 601 to Bamberg, South Carolina, replaced S.C. Highway 33 to Ulmer, South Carolina, replaced S.C. Highway 508 to Allendale, South Carolina, and replaced S.C. Highway 73 to the Georgia state line.[5] In Georgia, US 301 was marked along State Route 73 to Glennville, Georgia, State Route 23 to Folkston, Georgia, and State Route 4 to the border with Florida, numbers that it still has today.[8] In Florida it ran along State Road 15 to Callahan, Florida, State Road 200 to Ocala, Florida, State Road 25/State Road 500 to Belleview, Florida, State Road 35 to Dade City, Florida, State Road 39 to Zephyrhills, Florida, and State Road 41 to Tampa, Florida.[9] As with Georgia, these State Road numbers still exist."

The section of road I am referring to, the part of the highway in question, was built earlier as a state road 41 from Zephyrhills to Tampa, it was incorporated into the US highway system in the late 1940's.

There is a section on SR 41 http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Florida_State_Road_41 but it does not give a build date.

In the US, road designations indicate who is responsible for maintenance and upkeep. Interstate and US highways are paid for by the federal government, While state and county roads are paid for by each respectively. other roads are the responsibility of municipalities or may even be privately maintained.

FS

Done all mentioned above. I left 'in construction' as it makes sense, thanks.

I think that's me done then. You can find the result at A87761631

Please do let me know if I've missed something after all.

Bel

I have now returned it for publication.

Hi Florida Sailor

(hope nobody minds me joining this thread)

As this Entry has now been subbed I wonder if you had a chance to make a picture to illustrate your Entry already? If you don't make one I can only draw and add a map but it would be great to have an actual photo. If you still plan to make one we'll need it pretty soon I'm afraid.

thanks

I E-maied a few about a month ago, if there not in the the mailbox let me know and I'll re-send. they are from DaeBurr AT AOL

Hm, if you sent them to artists at h2g2 dot com we really should have got them. We don't get a lot of emails (also hardly any spam) so I'm really surprised that we missed it. I'll check again when I'm back home (in a few hours) and will then let you know. Thank you!

Sorry, I#m afraid there is no email from you on the artists email account. Please send it again.

Sent four seperate emails with one photo each.
Please drop me a note here when you get them.

Thanks

FS

Thanks, it seems like another email with pictures didn't arrive so we may have tech problems. I'll check our emails again as soon as I can.