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Recumbentman Posted Feb 18, 2003
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you are looking 'along its barrel', and therefore the rainbow's shape in three dimensions simply forms part of a cone.
? That looks good, but I would like to mention the word 'conical' and this seems the right place. Maybe I'm wrong. Need to weigh it up.
Actually you're probably right. What does 'conical' add beyond a longer word for cone?
something I don't like though -- the 'shape' 'forms' part of a cone . . . no, the shape 'is' something.
How about
you are looking 'along its barrel', and therefore the rainbow's shape in three dimensions is simply part of a cone.
You can see me restraining myself from putting in a colon (what do you mean, I'm a colon lover?) or an em dash, to act as a 'ta-da' after 'simply'!!
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Recumbentman Posted Feb 18, 2003
Or maybe you meant
you are looking 'along its barrel', and therefore in three dimensions the rainbow forms part of a cone.
Actually that looks good
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Mu Beta Posted Feb 18, 2003
OK...last change. That's it. Finito.
The Towers will probably muck it about so badly you won't recognise it anyway, but at least I can say it's not my fault.
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Mu Beta Posted Feb 18, 2003
Well, they might be gentle with it...I can't guarantee that some of your more fanciful poetry will stay, though.
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