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echomikeromeo

Hi Emmilysmiley - smiley

I've subbed your entry on eggy bread (A11484975); it only awaits your perusal. If you could take a look and make sure that everything looks all right, that would be most excellent.

smiley - cheers


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Emmily ~ Roses are red, Peas are green, My face is a laugh, But yours is a scream

smiley - cheers emr smiley - smiley

I'm a little concerned that you've changed the meaning of -

>"Scouts, and to a lesser extent; Guides and other youth organisations,"

to

>"Scouts, Guides (to a lesser extent) and other youth organisations"

It's no longer clear that Guides are included in the "lesser extent"

My sentence may have needed puncuation changes, but I think it is clearer smiley - smiley

Emmily
smiley - bluebutterfly


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Post 3

echomikeromeo

How about 'Scouts; to a lesser extent, Guides; and other youth organisations'?

I know that means that there is a comma before the 'and', which there shouldn't strictly be, but that's the best way I can think of to get the meaning across.


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Emmily ~ Roses are red, Peas are green, My face is a laugh, But yours is a scream

That'd be great smiley - cheers emr smiley - smiley

Emmily
smiley - bluebutterfly


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Post 5

echomikeromeo

smiley - ok


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