h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Chinese Cinema: "The Fifth Generation"
I am just about finishing subbing your entry, I have one small query. I've starred a portion of this sentence, does it say what you meant to say? As I wasn't sure and thought I would check before I sent it off. Apart from that I think I'm done, if you want to look it over before I send it, it's here. http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A657236

"The Chinese theatre was similarly stylised (as can be seen in Farewell My Concubine) and with the adoption of realistic acting and sets directors and cinematographers used other **elements theatrical elements within their mise en scene,** such as symbolic use of colour (and darkness) and complex semiological signifiers to communicate meaning."

I think wht i meant was:

"The Chinese theatre was similarly stylised (as can be seen in Farewell My Concubine) and with the adoption of realistic acting and sets, directors and cinematographers used other elements - theatrical elements - within their mise en scene, such as symbolic use of colour (and darkness) and complex semiological signifiers to communicate meaning."

Does it make more sence with that punctuation?

Yes, it does, thanks.
I'll change that and then send it off.

I'm a bit trepidacious (is that a word?) about how much pruning is going to be required to pull this in at under the 2000 word mark. Or is it to be split into two halves?

I've finished and sent it back to the editors now. I didn't prune anything, or put in a line to show where to split, as it was mentioned in the Scout's message that you weren't keen on having it over two entries. It should go through as one entry now. But it is down to the editors.

I was a bit worried about splitting it, as i didn't think it would flow very well as two seperate entries. But it would be better than heavy editing. And i guess it could be split in the middle to seperate the cultuaral comparisons at the end. But i'd thought of it as one article, and had written it as such, you know...

I didn't think that it was too long to go through as one, but I'm a fairly new editor, and so I'm still learning how it works. It might be worth having a word with one of the editors about it.

A**e, i just missed the front page thingy didn't i. The edited entry is up and running, my first. I only found it by accident while i was searching for another entry. Bum.

Nice little logo they've given it.

Shame we had tolose the other pics though, i thought they worked really nicely.

You should have had an email when it went up on the front page. They always send one to the address in your preferences.

Yeah, it's a shame about the pics, but they'll still be in your orignal one.

Maybe it hasn't been on the front page then? I got a congratulations thing, but it didn't mention the front page at that point.

That was when it was on the front page. The email says that your entry has been used as the basis for an Edited Entry, meaning that it's been entered into the Guide that day.

Bugger.