h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Hi Amy

I'm sub-editing your fabulous article on Backyard Chicken Coops here: A87846547 - this is the Entry which will go live so you need to subscribe to it so you'll read any postings.

I have one query so far:

>>4H is a program that teaches life skills to children between the ages of none and nineteen<<

should that be "nine and nineteen" or "one and nineteen"?

Also, the humongous amount of footnotes makes my eyes water (and they cannot be read on mobile devices) so do you mind if I incorporate as many as I possibly can into the text?

GB

I can't believe how many times I missed that... "none" should be "nine"

Yeah, even for something by me, that's a lot of footnotes... Incorporate what you can

I already subscribed to the version you're working on

Good girl

*continues reading*

"Also, dino descendants..."

do you mean dinosaurs there? I could link to A65191007

Yep!

And yes, do

I have finished my read-through, do please check you agree with any changes I have made

I have managed to get the footnote-count down to 20, once again please check what I have incorporated doesn't spoil the flow of your Entry. If you disagree with anything we can discuss it before returning - and there's no rush



GB

Looks good, though I did see some little things (typo-type things). I'll have to wait until I can get to a computer to copy-paste, though.

ooh, I hope it's nothing I've done!

I knew that there was some reason I was supposed to borrow Tom's laptop (mine's awaiting repair--the part has been ordered...) I don't remember now what I found. I'll get on when I've a chance

OK, Tom's at class, and I have his laptop.

Er, if any of these are due to US vs British English (I'm thinking the titles), then just ignore...

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Eggs with a Shell Colour Different to what one is Accustomed to are Inferior in some way

should be

Eggs With a Shell Color Different To What One is Accustomed To are Inferior in Some Way

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Who can have Chickens?

Who Can Have Chickens?

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In "Who Can Have Chickens" first paragraph--

how near enclosures may be to the property lines of other buildings.

should be

how near enclosures may be to the property lines or other buildings.

(What I meant was that sometimes there's regulations regarding how close a coop may be to buildings (mainly the home) on the same property. Maybe a rewording is needed?)

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Day-old Chicks

Day-Old Chicks

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In "Housing Hens", first paragraph--

overcrowding, an coop should have

should be overcrowding, a coop should have

(That one was on me--I'm comparing my copy with yours as I go...)

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That's all I saw

OK I have made the changes. I've used the British English "colour" but everything else is as you have requested

I changed the subheader 3-letter words (and unimportant words) to lower case as that used to be house style but I admit it does look silly to have some capitalised and some not.

how near enclosures may be to the property lines of other buildings. = should be: how near enclosures may be to the property lines or other buildings.
I meant to ask you whether it should be "of" or "or" - as it didn't quite make sense to me - but I forgot, sorry (I've been having a lot of problems with sub-editing, the Captcha system hates me but someone is working on ways round it for me now

Thanks for explaining what you meant - I am sure it was just me - and doesn't need a rewrite!

Day-Old Chicks - I have always made a hyphenated second word lower case (unless it's a name) but as it's just the once I've changed it back.

I think this is now ready to return, unless you want to skim through my changes?



GB

I frankly don't think I can read through it yet again so I'll trust your opinion

it is a mega read worthy of an e-bookbut I think you have every aspect covered and I'd recommend this to anyone thinking of keeping chickens

GB

It's not the length so much as how many times I've read it since the majority of it was written for NaJoPoMo Figuring out what order to have the sections in, GuideMLing everything (footnotes and determining what words to attach to the links were especially annoying), changing subheaders once I'd realized the alliteration and wanted to keep it going...

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*brings basket of mufflewhumps*

*is bemused that phone knows that "mufflewhumps" comes after "basket of" *