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T.B. Falsename ACE: [stercus venio] I have learned from my mistakes, and feel I could repeat them exactly.

umm, I was wondering, though, about the title. Specifically I was wondering about the dubious punctuation...sorry about this but as a writer and someone who taught for a, very, short while I spot 'issues' which normal people would never notice.

Was the punctuation, in afore mentioned title, meant to be ambiguous? That is was it done in an ironic way, or did you just not notice it?

In case you have no idea what I'm talking about, I'm referring to the fact that "Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling" can be read in two ways: "Grammar: Punctuation and Spelling" or "Grammar, Punctuation, and Spelling".

Incidentally I feel I should reiterate that I liked the poem, further I like the fact that the punctuation of the title is not as clear as it could be.


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Hello, liked your poem in the post...

Post 2

Jhawkesby

Thankyou very much. smiley - cheers
You are the first person to comment on my poem.
I didn't really think about the title in that way. it is suppose to be read with the commas but I suppose it could be read however you like. When I typed the title it was quite quick so I didn't think much about anything else to it. A bit of the punctuation in the poem was added when it was edited.
Do you like creating poems.


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Post 3

T.B. Falsename ACE: [stercus venio] I have learned from my mistakes, and feel I could repeat them exactly.

I mostly write poetry. Although that's because I find writing stories to be a rather strange process. I tend not to know exactly how the story is going to happen; I sort of let the story write it's self. However that means that stories either get written really quickly or they take forever to finish, depending on how helpful the characters are being.

I've had two poems published in The Post, although I've got another one coming up. However a large proportion of my poems aren't really suitable for The Post as they can be quite dark.


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Post 4

Jhawkesby

I find that writing stories can take long and before you finish them you find yourself more interested in something else so writing poems are so much more fun because they can be quick and they can be read faster as well so they are more catchy. Your poems are really good by the way so I am looking forward to reading some more. I think that everybody has different tastes so whatever theme your poems are then it doesn't really matter. smiley - smiley


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Post 5

T.B. Falsename ACE: [stercus venio] I have learned from my mistakes, and feel I could repeat them exactly.

well, here's an example of one of my 'other' poems. It's entitled My Bad Habits.

Here I stand,
'Tween dark and light.
Emotionless
And lost from sight.
I test the edge,
My blade, my knife.
It brings me pain,
Delivers life.

I break the skin.
It sets me free,
And fills me with
Bright agony.
You look at me
With veiled contempt.
It seems, from pity,
I am exempt.

It's self inflicted,
Self abuse.
My reasoning,
To you abstruse.
But all I have,
This pain I feel,
To keep me sane,
To make life real.

I'd stop tomorrow,
If I could,
If I believed
It would do good.
But without pain
I'd slide to Hell,
Revert to just
My hollow shell.

And so once more
I test the edge,
To keep from sliding
Off this ledge.

I'm sure you can see why I think a lot of my poems probably aren't The Post type material. I don't think depressing people with morbid works like that would be an overly good idea. Also the BBC might not approve.


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Post 6

Jhawkesby

I suppose so but I still like it. smiley - ok
I am sure a poem like that appearing in The Post now and then wouldn't hurt. Do you like writing in any other themes.


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Post 7

T.B. Falsename ACE: [stercus venio] I have learned from my mistakes, and feel I could repeat them exactly.

umm, I do obsessive and creepifying too,

Ensnared in pain and grief,
For I am dazed and lost,
Yet unto mine own heart,
I do declare and then out loud proclaim,
That in thy presence I am found again.


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Post 8

Jhawkesby

I liked your poem in The Post. smiley - smiley


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Post 9

T.B. Falsename ACE: [stercus venio] I have learned from my mistakes, and feel I could repeat them exactly.

thanks,,,although it may be just ever so slightly slightly sexist smiley - winkeye


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Post 10

Jhawkesby

Hi again. I really enjoyed your poem in The Post and it looks as though you me have come to five articles each. smiley - laugh

So has anything much been happening. smiley - smiley


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Post 11

T.B. Falsename ACE: [stercus venio] I have learned from my mistakes, and feel I could repeat them exactly.

Well, my computers have both gone on strike and I got another year closer to 30, but I got a new keyboard which somewhat makes up for that.


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